Question

16．假定你是李华，你的美国笔友Johnson来信说他因对父母说谎而受到严厉批评，因此他情绪低落．请你用英语给他写一封回信，主要内容包括：
1．进行安慰；
2．指正错误；
3．给出建议．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Johnson，
I'm sorry to hear that you feel depressed now．Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
As a high school student，it's wrong for you to lie to your parents．We have been taught to be honest since we were very young．We should behave honestly and be ourselves in daily life．In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）In a word，don't make up any excuse and lie to your parents．Ihope you can feel better and come back to the normal life．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你是李华，你的美国笔友Johnson来信说他因对父母说谎而受到严厉批评，因此他情绪低落．请你用英语给他写一封回信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：进行安慰；指正错误；给出建议  2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：feel depressed感到沮丧；lie to向…撒谎；In addition另外；get into trouble惹上麻烦；In a word总之；make up 编造，组成
Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Johnson，
      I'm sorry to hear that you feel depressed now．Although it's a shame that you got punished severely by your parents，it's a useful experience and lesson for you，so you don't have to feel so depressed，and just let it go．（高分句型一）
      As a high school student，it's wrong for you to lie to your parents．We have been taught to be honest since we were very young．We should behave honestly and be ourselves in daily life．In addition，if you get into trouble and need your parents'help，you'd better go ahead to say them out to them．（高分句型二）In a word，don't make up any excuse and lie to your parents．I hope you can feel better and come back to the normal life．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．