Question

【题目】假定你是李华，一周前刚从英国伦敦游学回国，期间住在Peter家。回国前，Peter和家人开车带你游览伦敦市内著名景点，并拍了很多照片。请你给Peter写封邮件，要点如下：

1.表示感谢；

2.请他发送照片给你；

3.邀请他和家人来中国旅游。

注意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可适当加人细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯；

3.信的开头和结尾已给出。

Dear Peter,

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

How time flies! It has been a month since we parted. No words can express my thanks to you and your family for pulling me up in your house when I was having a learning lour in London. You made me feel at home by offering me great help and conveniences.

It’ s very considerate of you and your parents to drive me to some of the major attraction in London the weekend before I left, for which I’ll always be grateful! We had a lot of pictures taken together, and enjoyed ourselves very much. As those pictures are precious memories of my life there. I’ll appreciate it if you can send some of them to me.

By the way, I sincerely invite you and your family to visit China and I’ll be at your service.

Please remember me to your parents and I’m expecting your early reply!

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类的作文，题目中已经为考生列出了所有需要写作的要点，主要以李华在英国游学回国之后就在英国的所见所闻所感为内容给peter写一封邮件，因而考生在写作这篇文章是一定要将题目中的所有内容都囊括进去，并且要注意书信的写作格式。考生需要注意以下几点：

这是一篇记叙类文章要注意文章表达时所用的时态 不要一种时态用到底。

考生在进行写作的时候要注意句子语法的正确性，以及熟语 短语 以及词汇运用的正确性。

文章一定要次序分明，将题目中的要点全都囊括进去，各部分衔接紧密。

【范文亮点】

文章一开头就使用time file 时光飞逝 这一术语一定程度上提高了文章的文学性。

文章时态运用合理，主要使用了过去完成时和现在完场时为主要时态例如 We had a lot of pictures taken together, and enjoyed ourselves very much. 这句话就巧妙地将过去完成时和过去时结合到了一起，这使得文章更为连贯。

文章充分使用各种从句包括限制性，非限制性定语从句，例如It’ s very considerate of you and your parents to drive me to some of the major attraction in London the weekend before I left, for which I’ll always be grateful!后半部分非限制性定语从句的使用是的文章的表述更为地道。

文章格式符合信件类格式，内容安排合理，值得借鉴。