Question

11．为纪念汶川大地震三周年，某英文报发起关于灾区新貌的征文活动．请根据以下图片提示，以"Great Changes"为题，用英语写一篇短文应征．内容要点如下：
（1）某中学灾后三年来的变化，如教学与活动场所，以及师生精神面貌等；
（2）发生变化的原因；
（3）你的感想．
注意：
（1）短文标题与开头已给出，不计入总词数；
（2）可根据图片提示适当发挥
（3）词数：120左右
Great Changes
    I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past tree years．
On May 12，2008，a severe earthquake destroyed almost everything in the school，leaving badly-damaged buildings．It is now，however，taking on a new look．Tall buildings have been put up，including classroom and laboratory buildings，and a library．There is also a newly-built standard playground．In the new environment，teachers and students are living happily and working hard．It is really amazing that the once-ruined place has now been turned into a beautiful school，full of life．
Obviously，without the help of the whole society，there would be no new schoo l today．It is love and concern that have brought the great changes．Many hands make light work．We can work wonders if we continue as a family，caring for each other and helping those in need．Union is strength．．

Answer 1

分析 本文采用了"图表+提纲类"形式，根据文章所给提示信息和图片提示以"Great Changes"为题给某英文报写一篇征文．写作要点：（1）某中学灾后三年来的变化，如教学与活动场所，以及师生精神面貌等；（2）发生变化的原因；（3）你的感想．既是提纲作文又是图画类作文．时态应该以一般过去时和一般现在时为主．人称以第三人称为主．重要短语：be impressed by（对…．印象深刻），take place  （发生），take on a new look （呈现新面貌），turned into （变成），without the help of （在…．帮助之下），care for（关心），in need （需要）．

解答 Great Changes
     I am deeply impressed by the great changes that have taken place in the school over the past three years．
     On May 12，2008，a severe earthquake destroyed almost everything in the school，leaving badly-damaged buildings．【高分句型】It is now，however，taking on a new look．Tall buildings have been put up，including classroom and laboratory buildings，and a library．There is also a newly-built standard playground．In the new environment，teachers and students are living happily and working hard．It is really amazing that the once-ruined place has now been turned into a beautiful school，full of life．【高分句型】（三年来的变化）
     Obviously，without the help of the whole society，there would be no new schoo l today．【高分句型】It is love and concern that have brought the great changes．（发生变化的原因） Many hands make light work．【高分句型】We can work wonders if we continue as a family，caring for each other and helping those in need．Union is strength..（你的感想）

点评 写好这类图片及提纲式作文的关键是认真分析所给提示信息，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将要点完整地表述出来，并认真看图，围绕主题，提炼要点，发挥想象，语言力求准确、简洁．选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．