Question

进入初三后，你的朋友Larry变化很大，昨天班会课老师表扬了他。你为他感到高兴，一高兴你就想写点什么，于是就写了一篇关于他变化的文章以之鼓励。

Larry	过去	现在
个性	内向，朋友少，偶感孤独	外向，友好，朋友多
作业	没有完成，抄别人的	在朋友的帮助下，能完成
行规	上课吃东西，听音乐,这是不允许的	遵守班规,上课认真，进步大，老师喜欢
理想	篮球运动员，父母反对，打球妨碍学习	英语好，想当英语教师，
…	…	…

提示：used to do sth (used to be…)   feel lonely          copy others’ homework 
obey the class rules  with the help of     make progress  be allowed to do… 
注意：1．所写内容必须包括表格中的信息
2．表格中的… 必须你自己拓展。
3．词数：100个左右。要求意思连贯，语句通顺
4．文中不得出现真实的人名与校名
 My friend Larry has changed a lot.                                                                
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                                   
                                                                             
                                                                            
                                                                            

Answer 1

My friend Larry has changed a lot. He used to be introverted. He had few friends so he used to feel lonely sometimes. And his study was also poor. He couldn’t finish his homework by himself, so he copied others. In class he didn’t obey the class rules. For example, he used to listen to music in class, which was not allowed. He wanted to be a basketball player, but his parents were against of it because they thought it might impair learning.
Fortunately, all these have changed. Now he is more outgoing and friendly. He has more friends too. With the help of friends he can finish the homework by himself now. To the teachers’ surprise, he makes great progress in study because of his hard working. Besides, he is good at English now so he wants to be a English teacher in the future.
I am so proud of the great changes that he has made. I hope he can make greater progress from now.

试题分析：这是一篇材料作文。材料中已经给出了具体的信息，写作时要把这些要点用正确的句子表达清楚，注意句子之间的逻辑关系，适当的使用连词。由于材料中涉及到过去和现在两种情况，所以表述时尤其注意时态和动词的变化。
【亮点分析】
这篇作文紧扣材料，内容充实，表达清晰流畅。文中使用了很多连词，加强了句子的逻辑关系，例如and， so， for example， but， because，等等。文中也有些复杂的长句，如：For example, he used to listen to music in class, which was not allowed.例如，他过去常在课堂上听音乐，这是不允许的。Which引导了一个非限制性定语从句。To the teachers’ surprise, he makes great progress in study because of his hard working.令老师惊喜的是，由于他的努力学习，他取得了很大进步。To one’s surprise令某人惊讶的是， make progress取得进步；because of因为。