摘要：1．句式混乱.结构不清.中文式英语 I think Xiao Hong should ask to throught the road’s people to go Green Hill way. Then she should help the crossroad to stand. Or she should go to a tellphone will beat near and call for her friend. 2．动词形式.短语.人称使用不正确. At first, she can asking somebody who cross there for help. The second way, she can take phone to home and asks his family who can answer her question. The third way is take phone to 110. They can help she. Because Xiao Hong from Orange Town was on her way to her friend’s house in Green Hill . She can bring the signpost on way She can get up it and the Orange Town singnpost her way where from come from . I think the Green Hill’s way that will be find out. 3．太罗嗦. ①The first way, she can wait for a moment to find a person and then she can ask the person the way. They can put the signpost right. The second way, if there is a phone, she can phone to her friend to ask the way. Her friend can tell her to find the right way. The tired way, if there is no phone and she didn’t find a person, she can choice a way and walk. She gets there. Then she asks the way. (6) ②What could she do? She couldn’t go when she lost her way. She sat on the roadside to wait for a man who could help her. Soon a man came to towards her. She asked for help. The man is a kind-hearted man. He helped Xiao Hong and made the signpost show the right directions. I think she also can find a police station for help or she could phone her friend ask which way she should take. (6) 4．所给的方法不合理.没有边际的开放. I think she can to there in the way she tell the plants around the road because the way to Green Hill must grow many grasses and flowers. On the other hand, she can use the direction of wind to judge which way she could find out for the signpost can be rolled towards the wind. (3) 优秀 ①First , she could ask for help from the passer-by, who were walking the road. The second, she could use the signpost. Let the signpost lead to the way from Orange Town. Then, she could find the way to the Green Hill. And the last way was that she telephoned her friend and asked her friend to pick up her. (此文章优点是层次分明.句式表达简练,不足之处是部分词语使用欠准确)(11) ②She can phone her friend and ask where he or she live, or she can asking local policeman for help, or she can judge by herself. Because she set out from Orang Town. So she know where is Orange Town. So the other road was Green Hill.(此文语言简明扼要. 用词准确思路清晰.不足之处是句式变化少.且最后一点表述不太清楚.)(10) ③Xiao Hong could pick the signpost up and the Orange Town should touch toward the way where she came from. She also could see the sun, the sun was the east. Then she could find the way to her classmate. There was another way that she could telephone her classmate and asked him to pick her up. (此文章能够想出合理的办法解决问题.且结构紧凑.句式正确.表述清晰—also, another 用的非常好,不足之处是没有认真审题.不是找classmate, 部分单词有错误) (12) General requirements of writing •1.认真审题.即:审语境.审人称.审时态 •2.要紧扣主题.符合要求.首尾呼应 •3.注意写作对象和语言风格.要有读者的意识 •4.要进行细致描写.有细节的支撑 •5.要有主次之分. 详略得当 •6.要力求内容新颖.必须符合逻辑 •7.要做到思想健康.积极向上

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