Question

根据下面表格，以“南极洲”为题写一篇短文，词数100个左右．

Answer 1

答案：
解析：

例文：

Antarctic

　　Antarctic, which is the coldest continent in the world, which① lies in the extreme south of earth②．It has an area of about 140,000 square kilometer③．It is covered with thick ice and deep snow all year long．But it was④ a very rich continent．Here live many well-known animals, such as penguin, whales, and it is also rich in mineral resource⑤ including iron, coal and so on．Up to now only some visiting scientists have lived there．Maybe one day lots of families will move to live in⑥ there．

修改：

　　①去掉which　分析句子结构可知，该句缺少谓语动词，所以应去掉which．

　　②earth前加the为世界上独一无二的事物，所以前面应加the．

　　③kilometer→kilometers因为前面有复数修饰语140,000．

　　④was→is本文时态环境为一般现在时，所以was应改为is．

　　⑤resource→resources resource为可数名词，前面没有单数修饰语，所以应用复数形式resources．

　　⑥去掉in there为副词，前面不用介词修饰，应去掉in．

点评：

　　本篇书面表达习作是一篇说明文，符合说明文的写作特点．小作者有较为丰富的语言知识和较强的语言表达能力．但是本文也存在一些不足之处，出现了一些语法错误，如定语从句关系代词误用、冠词、名词单复数、介词的错误等，这些错误大多因追求较为高级的表达方式所致．从总体上讲，本文不失为一篇优秀的书面表达习作，值得广大学生借鉴和模仿．