题目内容
【题目】每年三月是植树活动月,假定你是李华,你们班开展了一次植树活动,请你根据以下要点,写一篇日记,记叙这次植树活动。
1)活动目的:亲近自然,绿化环境
2)活动时间:2017年3月12日
3)活动地点:西山(距你校5公里)
4)具体活动过程
5)活动感受
注意:1. 运用日记的正确形式
2. 字数100 左右
3. 可适当增加细节,使行文流畅.
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【答案】March 12,2017 Sunny
Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment. In the morning, we took a bus to Western hill which is 5 kilometers away from our school. On arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action.
Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect our environment.
【解析】文章要点已经给出,在写这篇文章时要注意以下几点:
1.整篇文章时态以一般过去时为主。
2.要点要齐全,但是不要进行简单的罗列,可以采用适当的连接词,或者是表递进关系的副词如Before、After,使上下文衔接自然,行文自然流畅。
3.此作文要分三个部分写,每个部分要列举一下例子,最好用简单句与复合句结合的方法写作如We feel it’s our duty to protect our environment和Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment。
4.多采用一些高级句型,如we’d better wear masks when we go outside,It’s one of the most dangerous weather conditions,同时使用一些词组如On arrival ,took away from,put up等。
【范文亮点】
提纲性文章难点:扩充成句,因为提纲性文章主题内容已经基本列出,在将短句扩充时,要精炼。其中要注意尽量用高级词汇和复杂句是来表达,如强调句,定语从句等,就如文中“Today our class held a tree planting activity which aims to get close to the nature and beautify the environment. ”使用的是定语从句。再者就是要多使用一些高级词汇与词组,如文中On arrival ,took away from,put up等。最后就是要段落清新,层次分明。就像文中要多使用一些连接词语如Before、After,使衔接自然。