Question

1．一周前你去香港度假时在一家商店买了一件上衣，现有质量问题．请结合下面提示向该店外籍经理写一封英文信．
所购衣物：绿色上衣，价格268港元．
问题：洗涤时褪色．
要求：退款或换衣．
注意：1．词数不少于50．
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
参考词汇：褪色fade in color

Dear Sir，
While I was on holiday in Hong Kong about a week ago，
I bought a green shirt for 268 HK dollars in your shop，butthere seems to be something wrong with it．When it is washed，it fades incolor．Now I can't possibly wear it．It's not my fault，so I'd like you tosolve the problem for me．I insist you change it for another one for me or giveme a refund．I will appreciate it so much if my demand is met．
I'mlooking forward to your early reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一封英文信，向香港度假村一家商店的外籍经理反映衣服有质量问题．写作要点包括：1．所购衣物：绿色上衣，价格268港元； 2．问题：洗涤时褪色；3．要求：退款或换衣．
写作时人称以第一人称和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．
重要短语：be on holiday （度假），There seems to besomething wrong with sth （似乎…出问题），can't possibly （不可能），It's not one's fault （不是某人的错），would like to do （想要做某事），solve the problem （解决问题），change A for B（A换B），give sb a refund （给某人退款），look forward to（期望，预期）．
【高分句型】
1．I insist you change it for another one for me or give me a refund．
这里是insist宾语从句中虚拟语气，insist+句子（should+V原形）"坚持要求做某事"．
 2．I will appreciate it so much if my demand is met．
这里是由it作形式宾语，句型为"I appreciate/love/like/hate/dislike+it+if/when从句"．

解答 Dear Sir，
While I was on holiday in Hong Kong about a week ago，I bought agreen shirt for 268 HK dollars in your shop，（所购衣物：绿色上衣，价格268港元）but there seems to be something wrong with it．When it is washed，it fades incolor．Now I can't possibly wear it．（问题：洗涤时褪色） It's not my fault，so I'd like you to solve the problem for me．Iinsist you change it for another one for me or give me a refund．【高分句型】Iwill appreciate it so much if my demand is met．【高分句型】（要求：退款或换衣）
I'm looking forward to your early reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．