Question

请以下列词语为关键词写一篇短文：

shy change dare overcome

内容：

1. 自己或他人的一次经历；

2. 你的感受。

注意：

1. 必须使用所给四个关键词；

2. 词数不少于120个；

3. 不能使用真实姓名或学校名称；

4. 开头已给出。

I used to be a shy girl and was afraid to speak before others,

Answer 1

I used to be a shy girl and was afraid to speak before others, but now I can make a speech in public. It was an activity that make me change so much. Last year I took part in a summer camp in which teachers taught me how to challenge ourselves and become independent. We were divided into groups and given difficult tasks. We must communicate with each other and express our opinions in order to complete the tasks. In the end, we succeeded in finishing the tasks. On the last day, all of us were given a chance to express ourselves in front of others. I didn’t dare to do it before, but that day I made it.

Everyone has shortcomings, but as long as you overcome them, you can make progress and achieve your goals.

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求根据所给词语用英语写一篇短文。写作要点包括：自己或他人的一次经历；自己的感受两个方面。必须使用给出的四个词汇，作文词数不少于120词；不能出现真实姓名或校名；开头不计入总词数；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：范文涵盖了所有的写作要点，进行了适当的拓展，并注意语句的连贯性；范文还使用了定语从句、条件状语从句等语法知识，具备较强的语言运用能力。

语法方面：定语从句①that make me change so much，②in which teachers taught me how to challenge ourselves；条件句as long as you overcome them等，语法知识运用比较娴熟，显示了较强的语法功底，也使作文句式变得多样；

篇章结构方面：范文注意使用in the end, on the last day, but等来衔接句子和段落，使表达变得更有条理；

短语和搭配方面：范文使用了in public, take part in, divide...into, communicate with, in order to do, succeeded in doing, give sb a chance to do, in front of, dare to do, make it, make progress等短语和搭配，使作文的内容变得充实。

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