Question

假如你是高一学生王刚，在放寒假之前你想写一封信给你的英文老师Mrs. Chen。
信的内容应包括以下几个方面：
1） Mrs. Chen的课堂生动有趣，自己进步很大；
2）自己在学习中的困难；
3）给老师的教学建议(至少两条)；
注意：1）不要逐条翻译;
2）字数为120左右，开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数；
3）不得使用真实姓名。
Dear Mrs. Chen,
How time flies! I have been your student for nearly half a year.
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Best wishes to you!
Yours,
Wang Gang

Answer 1

Dear Mrs. Chen,
How time flies! I have been your student for nearly half a year.
To begin with, I want to say thanks to you for your hard work . Besides, we all enjoy your lively and interesting class. And with your help, we have made such great progress in English.
To be honest, I still have some puzzles. I can’t keep so many new words in mind and don’t know how to use them correctly. What’s more, grammar is a big problem to me. I often mix up its rules. Would you please help me with these problems?
Mrs. Chen, as we hope to improve our listening ability, could you please speak more English in Class? And we can’t bear so much homework of all the subjects, so would you please reduce the amount of English homework?
Best wishes to you!
Yours,
Wang Gang

解析试题分析：本文是一篇书信体裁的书面表达，开头结尾已经给出，所以不用注意格式，只要把内容呈现出来即可，但因为是给老师写信，说话的语气和措辞要礼貌，尽量用上一些高级的句型和词汇，比如表示感激的I will be appreciate it if you can …..; I would be grateful if you …..; thank you for ….等，表示有困难短语：have difficulty with sth ；have trouble in doing sth等。因为提示要点包括三个方面，所以在结构安排上，可以采用三段式。此外，在连词成篇时，要恰当使用连接词，以使语言通顺流畅。
【亮点说明】范文使用典型的三段式结构，分别表达了对老师的感激，自己学习中的困难以及给老师的教学建议等，结构紧凑，层次分明。在文中作者使用了to begin with，besides ，to be honest ，what’s more 等插入语和副词，使文章语言衔接自然流畅。在提出建议时使用了could you please speak more English in Class?和Would you please reduce the amount of English homework? 等提出请求，这样使得语气更加委婉，增强了建议的可接纳性。
考点：考查提纲作文。