Question

【题目】下面两幅图反映的是部分城乡孩子所面临的窘境。请就此图谈谈你的想法，你的文章应包括：

● 具体描述两幅图；

● 简要分析造成这两种现象的原因；

● 提出解决问题的建议。

（注：请勿出现真实姓名和学校）

Answer 1

【答案】

The common thing in these two pictures is that both of the kids are having heavy burdens on the back and that they have suffered enough of their states. However, the difference lies in the situation that the city boy is overwhelmed by a big bag of books，while the back of the peasant boy is bended downward by a heavy bundle of rice straw. Apparently, though at the same age, they face clearly varied fates.

Students in cities grow numb with studies because their life is flooded with piles of test papers and routines of shuttling back and forth in various effective cram schools. Inversely, children in rural areas don’t have access to education. On one hand, educational facilities are long kept inadequate due to the underdeveloped transportation and to the shortage of qualified teachers, who are likely to prefer city life. On the other hand, their parents usually don’t value their being educated but urge them to drop out, for household farm work is scarcely linked to what the children are taught in schools.

To break this embarrassing situation, the government, playing the very core role, should help relieve the heavy studies burden on city students, and meanwhile offer enough subsided welfare in order to encourage more teachers to support the rural education cause. Besides, parents serve an important part in this problem. Those in cities shouldn’t push their children so hard in their academic performance 4while those in countryside should attach more importance to their kids’ school studies so that their children can keep track of the changing society. 8All in all, the government, educators and parents should get united to work out this problem.

【解析】

试题分析：本文为漫画作文。文章主要反映了城乡孩子面临的困境。考生首先要描述这两幅图，然后再分析造成这种现象的原因，最后要提出解决方法。漫画类作文开头一定要用来描述图片信息，语言要客观，不要那么快夹带自己的看法，就如同一般议论文那样开头要客观阐述现象一样。在写作时，要正确使用连接词，使文章通顺连贯。还要使用亮点词汇以及优秀句式，为文章增色。

【亮点说明】表语从句：首段用了两个表语从句的并列，记得第二个that是不能省的。短语：suffer enough of their states，受够了他们所处的现状。被动语态结构：用两种表述方式sb be overwhelmed by 和one’s back be bended downward by表述孩子身肩重负，表达多样化。连词：while表示前后鲜明对比。短语：be flooded with，生动说明城市学生每天的生活都被一系列的压力充斥着；并且生动描述了现在城市学生的生活究竟是被什么内容占据——写不完的试卷，穿梭在读不完的补习班里。逻辑连接词：有效阐述情况的不同方面。现在分词非谓语结构：现在分词可以当作定语从句来用，表达更显高级。逻辑连接词：避开Therefore／To sum up等常见结尾词，使得表达更显特色。