Question

【题目】假如你是李华。你的朋友Tommy是一个手机低头族，无论站着、坐着、走着，他都在低头玩手机。请就此给Tommy写一封信。

内容包括：1．做手机低头族的危害； 2．希望他改掉这个坏习惯。

注意：

1．词数100左右；

2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．开头语和结尾语已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：过度使用overuse

Dear Tommy,

There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are. And I know you are not an exception.

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tommy,

There seems to be trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are. And I know you are not an exception.

There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life. However , being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners. First, staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases. Second, if you always overuse your cell phone , your head as well as your neck will ache, which will have a bad effect on you. Besides, on your way home or to school , with your attention fully focused on the cell phone, perhaps , you will fail to notice the traffic around you, which will be a great danger to you.

Therefore, I sincerely wish you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely .

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。根据要点：

文章内容要点已经给出。考生在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：

1.根据题干中所描述的Tommy是一个手机低头族，无论站着、坐着、走着，他都在低头玩手机。对此给Tommy写一封信。写信的内容已经提示了，a．做手机低头族的危害；（至少两点）b．希望他改掉这个坏习惯。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词，使上下文行文流畅，衔接自然流程。同时注意时态和语态。

2.. 注意语气。既然该文是以劝告朋友不要做低头族为主题，所以要注意语气应该比较委婉。要注意书信的格式问题，言辞要诚恳。

【范文亮点】

1.文章采用了“There seems to be trend 似乎成为一种趋势”“There is no doubt that毫无疑问”“play an important part in在…中扮演重要角色（起重要作用）”“have a bad effect on对…有不良影响”等高分句式。

2.文中运用了“tend to倾向于”“no matter where 无论在哪里”“ be addicted to 沉迷于”“ First,Second,Besides,以及Therefore等连接词”“lead to 导致”“as well as也”“focused on集中精力于”“fail to失败于”“give up 放弃”等高级短语。