Question

仔细观察下列图画，写一篇100词左右的短文，描述一下骑车人李平在路上的经历。

Answer 1

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解析：

One day，Li Ping was riding in the road then an old woman was crossing the road①．She knocked the old woman down．Instead helped her stand up②，Li Ping shouted at the woman angrily．Then Li Ping rode on．Several minute③later，she found her shoes④ had been on the backseat of he bicycle，missing．She hurried back to the place where the accident happened．To her surprised⑤，Li Ping saw the old woman waiting⑥her．The old woman handed the shoes back to her，Feeling ashamed for⑦what she has⑧ done，Li Ping said sorry to the old woman． 　　From this story I learned everyone should be kind to each other．We shouldn't do as Li Ping did or，⑨ we'll feel sorry． 　　修改：①此处应是be doing when...句型，应改为when she saw an old woman crossing the road。 　　②Instead用法含混不清，应改为Instead of helping her stand up，... 　　③minute→minutes　several后面接复数，应改为minutes。 　　④had前加 which／that　此处缺少作主语的关系代词which或that，不可省略。 　　⑤surprised→surprise　to one's surprise为固定搭配。 　　⑥wait后加for　wait为不及物动词，应在其后加for。 　　⑦for→of　“对……感到羞愧”用be ashamed of。 　　⑧as→had　此处属时态错误，综合全文，此处应用过去完成时。 　　⑨去掉逗号　此处or与后面的分句不必分开。 　　评点：本篇习作要点齐全，段落层次分明，语言比较流畅，连续性比较强。但 是个别词语使用有误，需要在以后的练习中不断加强。