Question

【题目】假定你是某国外旅游杂志的编辑，最近要刊登了一组世界文明古迹的图片，其中包括下面的图片。请你根据所给关键词，用英语写一段说明，以便随图刊登。

The Great Wall

about 21,196 kilometres

15 provinces and cities

more than 2,000 years

the Spring and Autumn period

Qin Shihuang

注意: 1. 词数150左右； 2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】This is the Great Wall in China, one of the greatest wonders in the world.

The Great Wall spreads about 21,196 kilometres from east to west of China and covers 15 provinces and cities including Beijing and Tianjin and so on. With a history of more than 2,000 years, some parts of the Great Wall are now in ruins or even entirely disappeared. But it still attracts lots of visitors all over the world and there is even a saying that he who doesn’t reach the Great Wall is not a true man.

The Great Wall was firstly built in the Spring and Autumn period, and it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together, becoming the Great Wall. It was difficult to build such a wall in the ancient days without any modern tools. All the work was done by hand and this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.

【解析】

本文是一篇看图作文，要求考生根据图片信息用英语写一段说明，介绍图片里的世界文明古迹，据图片可知是中国的长城。所以文章要使用一般现在时和第三人称。

第一步：审题。文章介绍世界文明古迹：长城。使用第三人称和一般现在时。

第二步：组织要点：长城是世界奇观之一，沿途包括15个省和城市，长约21,192公里，有2000多年的历史；始建于春秋战国时期，在秦朝时建成。

第三步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

范文读图准确，要点齐备，很好地完成了所有的人物。全文没有中国式英语，体现出很高的语言素养。在文章里作者运用了较多的高级句式，如强调句型：it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together。非谓语动词... becoming the Great Wall.定语从句this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.这些高级句式的运用很好地提升了文章的层次。