Question

假设你是李华，几天前你从某国外网站购买了一支录音笔，现在你发电子邮件到该网站反映以下问题：

音质不太清楚；2.操作不简便；3.经常出问题。期待的解决办法：(1)退货退款；(2)修理或调换。

注意：1.字数120-150，开头结尾不计入总字数； 2.可适当增加细节，试行文连贯；

3.参考词汇 录音笔 recording pen

Dear Sir or Madam,

 

 

 

Best wishes,

Yours, Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to tell you something about the recording pen. I bought it from your website several days ago. However, there seems to be something wrong with it. First, the voice isn’t so clear as you claimed. Second, it’s not easy to operate, which has caused me much trouble. What I expect is a human-friendly one. Third, it often breaks down , while a recording pen at such a price shouldn’t have had so many problems.

Due to its poor quality and much inconvenience it has caused, I wonder whether you can do something about it. I would appreciate it very much if I can get my money back. I’ll send it back to you as soon as you return the money to me. If it can’t be helped, I wish you could have it repaired or changed.

I’m looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes,

Yours, Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：

题目要求发电子邮件反映遇到的问题。写作要点包括：音质不清；操作繁琐；经常出问题；期待的解决办

法：退货退款；修理或更换。词数在120-150之间，开头不计入总词数，可以适当拓展作文内容，但要保证

行文的连贯；使用上参考词汇。

亮点说明：首句I am writing to tell you something about the recording pen.点明意图；

范文注意使用However, First, Second, Third等连接上下文，表示列举，使作文层次分明、条理清晰；

范文使用了定语从句which has caused me much trouble，it has caused；情态动词和虚拟语气shouldn’t have had so many problems；主语从句What I expect；宾语从句whether you can do something about it；固定句型I would appreciate it very much if I can get my money back.；条件句If it can’t be helped；固定搭配have it repaired or changed；固定句型I’m looking forward to your early reply.等，使作文句式丰富，增强了说服力；

范文还使用了so clear as，breaks down，due to，send it back to，as soon as等短语和固定搭配，使作文内容得到充实。

考点：书信类作文