Question

【题目】假设你是李津，为即将来天津上大学的外国朋友Albert物色好了房屋。请你给 他发一封邮件告知他相关情况。主要内容包括：

1. 房屋位置：富力花园17楼，交通便利，临近校园；

2. 面积大小：50平米，一室一厅，厨卫齐全；

3. 屋内陈设：家具、空调等；

4. 租金情况：月付人民币1000元或年付人民币11000。

注意1. 词数不少于100；

2. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。

参考词汇：富力花园 Fuli Garden

Hello, Albert.

I have good news to tell you that I have found a flat for you in my city.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Jin

Answer 1

【答案】Hello, Albert.

I have good news to tell you that I have found a flat for you in my city. The flat is on the 17th floor in

Fuli Garden, which is not far away from the university you will study in. There are lots of basic facilities nearby, such as the banks, stores, restaurants, and so on. In a word, it's very convenient for your life.

The whole flat covers about 50 square meters with a living room, a bedroom, a kitchen, a bathroom and a balcony, which I think can satisfy your fundamental needs. It's also equipped with a refrigerator, a TV set, a washing machine, an air conditioner and the high-speed WiFi.

As to the rent, it can be paid per month (1,000 RMB) or per year (11,000 RMB). If you are interested in it, please e-mail me as soon as possible.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Jin

【解析】

这是一篇应用文。要求考生写一封邮件，告知即将来天津上大学的外国朋友Albert，他帮忙租到的房子的详细情况。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：告知房屋的详细情况

1）房屋的位置。（location of the flat）

2）周围的环境。（surroundings of the flat）

3) 房屋内容的设施。（facilities in the flat）

4) 房屋的价钱。（price of the flat）

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

far away from; facilities; In a word; be convenient for; fundamental needs; be equipped with; as soon as possible.;look forward to;

第三步：连词成句

1. Fuli Garden is not far away from the university.

2. There are lots of basic facilities nearby.

3. In a word, it's very convenient for your life.

4. I think it can satisfy your fundamental needs.

5. It's also equipped with a refrigerator.

6. Looking forward to your early reply.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改