题目内容
【题目】 针对现在中学生上课走神、近视率越来越高、身体素质下降等种种情况(如图所示),某中学提出了“EXERCISE AN HOUR A DAY,MAKE US HEALTHY.WEALTHY AND WISE”的健身号召。并要求每位中学生用英语写一篇短文,要求如下:
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1.锻炼身体的好处;
2.锻炼身体的方式;
3.你对学校开展体育锻炼的看法或建议。
4.字数在80词左右,开头已给出(不计人总词数)。
Exercise is very important to us students.Nowadays,we are under so much competition and pressure.______________________________________
【答案】
Exercise is very important to us students.Nowadays, we are under so much competition and pressure that our health is becoming worse and worse, poor eyesight, no enough energy for study, which makes us worried too much.We need to take part in all kinds of outdoor activities, such as having ball games, running, swimming and so on, from which we can keep healthy and strong study better and live happily.
No matter hoe busy, we wish teachers could leave us less homework to do so that we can have free tome to take part in sports.We also hope our school can offer us much more chance to do some activities which are good for us.
【解析】
试题分析:这篇短文要求我们对某个学校提出的锻炼身体的号召发表自己的看法。说一说锻炼身体的好处和方式,是一篇开放性的作文,题目中只给出了话题,短文的展开,内容的充实,都需要学生自己来完成。因此写作时,我们应首先想清楚如何来组织这篇短文,使它的内容完整,符合题目要求。关于锻炼身体的话题,在教材中曾提到过的,也是学生们比较熟悉的一个话题。它的好处有很多,如增强我们的体质,让我们精力充沛,学习进步;锻炼的方式也有很多,如跑步、游泳、体操等。最后我们还需要对学校的这一号召发表自己的看法或提出建议,这一部分的内容也是需要学生自己发挥来完成的。写作的时候,注意使用正确的时态和人称,多使用好的句型和短语,使文章表达流畅,意思连贯。
写作亮点:这是一篇优秀的作文,短文中作者按照题目的要求,对学校呼吁的健身号召提出了自己的看法和建议,并且阐述了锻炼身体的好处。首先作者就先点明了锻炼对于学生们来说是很重要的,并且阐述了原因;第二段中作者对学校和老师提出了一些建议,希望能给学生们更多的时间去锻炼身体。结构非常清晰。短文中作者还使用了较丰富的句型,如Nowadays, we are under so much competition and pressure that our health is becoming worse and worse, poor eyesight, no enough energy for study, which makes us worried too much、No matter hoe busy, we wish teachers could leave us less homework to do so that we can have free tome to take part in sports等。但是短文中长句较多,可以使用长短句结合,使文章更有节奏。