Question

15．Write a passage of at least 60words on the topic"When my friend is sad，I will …"．（ 以"当朋友难过时，我会…"为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格．．
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分．）
Use the following points as a reference．（以下问题仅供参考）
•What often makes your friend sad？
•What will you do for your friend when he/she is sad？
•How does your friend feel about what you've done for him/her？
As a saying goes，a friend in need is a friend indeed．Friendship is like a stream in valley，a gift in my life and a lighthouse into heaven．Therefore，when my friend is sad，I will give her comforts and encouragements，otherwise，friendship will be as same as cold winters without sunshine and sailing ships without compasses．I will help her get rid of difficulties and sorrows，even if ups and downs are always inevitable．I will share happiness and joys with her，foronly in this way can she finally burst into laughter．In brief，I'm deeply convinced that by doing so，friends shall never be sad again．．

Answer 1

分析 根据这篇文章的要求"When my friend is sad，I will…"（1）故要用第一人称来写，同时要注意写作的对象是我的朋友；（2）结合文章的时态应该用一般现在时和一般将来时；（3）在写作内容上要紧扣主题：a．什么使我的朋友难过？； b．我为我朋友所做的事情？； c．我朋友的感觉 （4）还需注意运用高级短语和高级句型，如：only+介词短语，注意倒装；与friend相关的friendship等词汇及谚语的运用：a friend in need is a friend indeed．； I am deeply convinced that 这样容易得高分的句子．

解答 参考答案：（1）As a saying goes，a friend in need is a friend indeed．（2）Friendship is like a stream in valley，a gift in my life and a lighthouse into heaven．Therefore，when my friend is sad，I will give her comforts and encouragements，otherwise （3）friendship will be as same as cold winters without sunshine and sailing ships without compasses．I will help her get rid of difficulties and sorrows，（4） even if ups and downs are always inevitable．I will share happiness and joys with her，for（5） only in this way can she finally burst into laughter．In brief，（6） I'm deeply convinced that by doing so，friends shall never be sad again．

点评 精彩亮点分析：
亮点一，首句使用谚语，"患难之间见真情"引入话题．
亮点二，使用修辞表述对友谊的理解．
亮点三，继续使用修辞，"否则友谊就像没有阳光的寒冬，没有指南针的航船"
亮点四，请学会使用如何表达"人生中总会有起伏"．
亮点五，only+介词短语，注意倒装．
亮点六，I am deeply convinced that 我深深的相信