Question

13．针对私家车日益增加的现状，学校就发展私家车的利弊进行调查，请根据提示内容写一篇90词左右的短文，阐述其利弊；可适当拓展并谈谈你的看法或建议．
有利因素：出行方便；促进社会发展
不利因素：造成交通拥堵，引发更多事故，加重环境污染
要求：
1．内容包含所有的提示信息；
2．意思连贯，语句通顺；
3．词数要求：80---100词．提示词：
1．do a survey  
2．private car； 
3．convient； 
4．cause pollution 
5．traffic accident
6．advice      
7．had better 
8．walk   
9．ride a bike  
10．instead of
Yesterday，our school made a survey about private cars．Some students think it'sconvenient for people to go by car．and it promote the development of societyBut most students don't agree．Neither do I．Cars can cause more serious pollution．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be．What's more，the traffic will be heavier．As a result，there will be more traffic accidents．
In my view，we should walk or go by bike instead of by car．We can also take a bus when we travel for a shot distance．We should do what we can for protecting our environment．Let's begin now．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是谈谈私家车的利弊和自己的观点，时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．有利因素：出行方便；促进社会发展
2．不利因素：造成交通拥堵，引发更多事故，加重环境污染
3．我的观点
常用到的重点短语：
make a survey  做调查
what's more 再者
instead of代替
by+交通工具 乘坐…
as a result结果
【高分句型】
1．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be．
"the+比较级，the+比较级"结构，常表示"越…，就越…"，是一个复合句，其中前面的句子是状语从句，后面的句子是主句．

2．We should do what we can for protecting our environment
 what we can作为do的宾语从句，what是引导词．

解答 Yesterday，our school made a survey about private cars．Some students think it's convenient for people to go by car．and it promote the development of society （有利因素）But most students don't agree．Neither do I．Cars can cause more serious pollution．The more people travel by cars，the worse our world will be【高分句型】．What's more，the traffic will be heavier．As a result，there will be more traffic accidents．（不利因素）
       In my view，we should walk or go by bike instead of by car．We can also take a bus when we travel for a shot distance．We should do what we can for protecting our environment【高分句型】．Let's begin now．（我的建议）

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．