Question

7．某中文网站提出"走路去上学"的提议，请你就这一话题写一篇约80词的英语短文．
要点如下：1）走路有利于健康且安全；
2）和同学结伴可以相互理解，相互帮助；
3）不需要父母接送，学会自理；
4）道路上车辆减少，城市不再拥堵；
要求：1）要点齐全，调理清楚，语句通顺，语法正确，书写规范；
2）文中不得出现真实的学校和姓名．
Walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise．I think it's good for health and it's safe．When we walk with our classmates，we can talk about something interesting and know each other better．Also，we can help each other．What's more，if we walk，our parents don't have to send us to school．We can learn to look after ourselves． As a result，there will be fewer cars in the city．Then the streets are no longer crowded．
I hope more and more students will go to school on foot．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文．内容是谈谈"走路去上学"的益处．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第一人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1）走路有利于健康且安全；
2）和同学结伴可以相互理解，相互帮助；
3）不需要父母接送，学会自理；
4）道路上车辆减少，城市不再拥堵；

常用到的重点短语：
be good for对…有利
each other彼此
no longer不再
what's more再者
【高分句型】
1．①What's more，②if we walk，our parents don't have to ③send us to school．
①what's more再者
②if引导的条件状语从句．
③send sb to sp送某人去某地
2．I hope①②more and more students will go to school ③on foot．
①hope后是省略了that的宾语从句．
②比较级+and+比较级，表示越来越…
③on foot步行

解答 Walking to school is a wonderful way to exercise． I think it's good for health and it's safe．（走路有利于健康且安全）When we walk with our classmates，we can talk about something interesting and know each other better．Also，we can help each other．（和同学结伴可以相互理解，相互帮助）What's more，if we walk，our parents don't have to send us to school．【高分句型】We can learn to look after ourselves．（不需要父母接送，学会自理） As a result，there will be fewer cars in the city．Then the streets are no longer crowded．（道路上车辆减少，城市不再拥堵）
I hope more and more students will go to school on foot．【高分句型】

点评 对待此类提纲作文，尤其是文字材料的提纲，切记要逐句翻译，写作前，首先要理清思路，然后选用合适的词或短语，让文意更通顺，例如本文可以用到Also，What's more．等短语和句型，让文章有过渡，有条理．