Question

【题目】Write at least 60 words on the topic "This was my promis" (请以“这就是我的承诺”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)

承诺是份责任，也是一种素养，在你的成长过程中，对家人、老师、朋友、同学和社会有过哪些与承诺有关的经历和感触呢?请结合自己的个人经历，选取一个角度，讲述一个具体事例。

(注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其它相关信息，否则不予评分。标点符号不占格)

The following is for reference only (以下表述仅供参考)

be responsible for ....

promise (sb.) that ..

make/ keep/ break one's promise

Answer 1

【答案】Promise is very important. Promise is a kind of responsibility. We shouldn’t break our promise. The one who can’t keep his promise is not reliable. Once, my friend asked me to company him, because he was alone at home and his parents were busy with their work. At first, I said yes to him. But I had a lot of things to do that afternoon. When I finished all the things, I found it was dark. I wanted to give up to company my friend. But thinking about his disappointed face, finally, I decided to keep my words. When my friend saw me, he was very happy and moved. He said he believed that I would come. So that was my promise. And I will always be the person that keep my promise.

【解析】

写作思路:本文指出承诺的重要性, 承诺是份责任.在生活中我们都应该遵守我们的承诺.接下来,要结合自己的生活经历,根据自己的具体事例说明自己的经历和感触，最后进行总结。在时态上,主要用一般现在时和一般过去时。本篇作文首先开篇点题，Promise is very important. Promise is a kind of responsibility. We shouldn’t break our promise. The one who can’t keep his promise is not reliable.我们应该做一个遵守承诺的人，接下来Once, my friend asked me to company him….., 列举自己遵守承诺的事例。最后So that was my promise.And I will always be the person that keep my promise.对全文进行总结。思路清晰，层次分明。其中一些连词，比如When…., but…., and….的使用使文章具有连贯性，浑然一体。