Question

15．Write at least 60words about the topic"When my friend is sad，I will  …"．（以"当我朋友难过时，我会 …"为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格．）
Use the following points as a reference （以下问题仅供参考）
★What often makes your friend sad？
★What will you do for your friend when he/she is sad？
★How does your friend feel about what you've done for him/her？
My best friend is Lily．She always shares her feelings with me．
Her awful score often makes her sad．When she doesn't pass the test，teachers and her parents will be angry with her．
I am sorry to know that，but I will tell her there is a old saying‘Let bygones be bygones'andI will teach her the knowledge that she doesn't know．I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．
When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder．That's what I want to see．I hope that she will pass the test and always be happy．
Lily is my best friend and I will always stay with her whenever she is happy or sad．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲作文，本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥．写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称，时态主要用一般现在时态进行叙述．语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．
高分句型：

①I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．我也让她更加努力地学习，以便她能通过下一次测试．句子中ask sb to do sth要求某人做某事，后面跟to引导的不定式形式，so that为了，引导一个目的状语从句．

②When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder．当我为她做这样做的时候，她总是感到很高兴，并且下决心更努力地学习．
句子中when引导一个时间状语从句，表示当…的时候，feel是一个系动词，后面跟形容词作表语；make one's mind to do sth下决心做某事，后面跟to引导的不定式短语．

解答 My best friend is Lily．She always shares her feelings with me．（引出话题）
Her awful score often makes her sad．When she doesn't pass the test，teachers and her parents will be angry with her．（点出让朋友难过的事情）
I am sorry to know that，but I will tell her there is a old saying‘Let bygones be bygones'and I will teach her the knowledge that she doesn't know．I also ask her to study harder so that she can pass the next test．（高分句型）（为朋友排忧解难）
When I've done this for her，she always feels much happier and makes up her mind to study harder（高分句型）．That's what I want to see．I hope that she will pass the test and always be happy．（朋友的感受）

点评 此题为提纲作文，要仔细审题，抓住描述的重点，把所给信息条理清楚的表达出来，要求语句通顺，单词，语法，时态正确，书写规范，字数合乎要求，切忌出现中文式的英语，这样才能算是一篇好作文．