Question

4．假定你的好友名叫Bill，十一名美国中学生，他打算今年暑假来宁夏旅游．请你根据以上内容和所给提示用英语写一篇介绍他的短文．短文首句已给出，不计入总词数．
提示：
1 家庭情况、性格及爱好；
2 老师及同学对他的评价；
3 来宁夏旅游的原因．
要求：
1 词数80左右；
2 合理增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Bill is my good friend．He is an American middle school student．He will come to travel in Ningxia this summer vacation．He is the only child in his family．His father is a doctor，and his mother is a teacher．He is friendly and is ready to help others．His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working．He often spends his spare time traveling around the world．He says that Ningxia has many famous places of interest．That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇命题作文，主要是让同学们写一篇短文来介绍一下美国好友Bill，他今年暑假将要来宁夏旅游，内容要点包括：1、家庭情况、性格及爱好；2、老师及同学对他的评价；3、为什么来宁夏旅游．由于介绍的是Bill，所以人称要使用第三人称，由于介绍的是他现在的状况和将要来旅行，所以时态要使用一般现在时和一般将来时，要根据不同的内容去选择合适的时态．
重要的短语和句型：
come to来到
the only唯一的
be ready to help others准备帮助他人
clever and hard-working聪明又努力
spend…（in） doing sth．花费时间或金钱做某事
travel around the world周游世界
places of interest名胜古迹
the reason why…的原因
高分句型：
His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working．他的老师和同学认为他很聪明，学习也很努力．
and连接两个不同的名词作主语，谓语动词要用复数，本句含有一个省略that的宾语从句
That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．那就是他什么来宁夏列旅游的原因．
why也可以引导定语从句，这时先行词往往是reason

解答 参考答案：
    Bill is my good friend．He is an American middle school student（介绍Bill的身份）．He will come to travel in Ningxia this summer vacation．He is the only child in his family．His father is a doctor，and his mother is a teacher（介绍家人）．He is friendly and is ready to help others．【高分句型一】His teachers and classmates think he is clever and hard-working（老师及同学对他的评价）．He often spends his spare time traveling around the world．He says that Ningxia has many famous places of interest（说明来宁夏旅游的原因）．【高分句型二】That's the reason why he will come to Ningxia this summer．

点评 写命题作文时，首先要仔细审题，确定要使用的人称和时态，还要注意罗列内容要点，内容要点不能有漏落，行文要流畅，可以适当的增添细节，在表达的时候，要使用地道的英语，可以使用把握比较高的结构，短语等等，比如宾语从句、定语从句等等，这样可以提高文章的档次，获得更多的得分点．