Question

【题目】假如你叫李华，你们学校正在创建“和谐校园”活动，倡导人人都做文明中学生。请你根据以下提示，给你的英国笔友Peter写一封邮件，告诉他你认为做个文明中学生什么是重要的，你通常是怎么做的，以及你的感受。

邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。

提示词语： think, smile, respect, say hello to, wait in line, on time, happy

Dear Peter,

How is it going? At my school we’re talking about what we should do to be a good student.

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Anything new at your school?

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

How is it going? At my school we’re talking about what we should do to be a good student.

To be a polite middle school student,I think we have to do a lot of things. First, It's important for us to speak politely. We must respect the others. When I meet someone I know ,I often greet him by saying hello to him happily. We are supposed to be kind to others, warm-hearted to everyone, and generous to our friends.Second, we can't throw rubbish everywhere. We must throw them in the rubbish bins. Littering is not a good habit. Every time I go to the park, I always pick up the litter and put it into the bin. I think if we all do so , the world will be cleaner.Anther important thing is that we must follow the rules . There is no doubt that waiting in line is the important rule. I never rush into the bus.Waiting may be a happy thing. I often feel happy when I do something that is better for us. I think being a polite middle school student is proud.

Anything new at your school?

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：这篇作文乍一看很难，学生可能不知道如何入手，但是提示词很多，比如smile，respect，wait in line等，所以学生都会有话可说。但是不代表这篇作文很好写，第一个问题是有陷阱的，学生很容易只表达what，进行描述却没有解释导致扣分。需要注意的是第二个要点，你平时是怎么做的？所以文章应该写成夹叙夹议，主体部分分点论述，谈谈自己平时是怎么做的，对于学生来讲，难点在于每说一点怎么做的，都要加上这一点的原因或者影响。最后一点要注意扣题和升华，孩子们容易草草结尾，谈不出有深度的感受。这表明中考对中学生的认知能力和社会理解能力提出了更高的要求。这篇作文也符合中考改革的方向，强调知识运用和文化理解，把语言用在生活中，将应试和能力更自然地结合起来。

写作亮点：这篇短文夹叙夹议，句式丰富，结构清晰，语言流畅。多种句型的应用为文章增色。如：It's important for us…, We are supposed to …, if we all do so..., ...when I do something that…,等。明确提出个人观点，针对个人观点阐述自己日常的文明行为。使用了熟悉的句型和表达方式，没有语法错误，符合题目要求，是一篇优秀作文。