Question

11．学生综合素质评价的方式多种多样，同伴互评是其中较为有效的方式之一，它可以让学生不断体验成长和学习过程中的进步，并正确认识自我，保持自信．
某班一个小组正在进行阶段性同伴互评活动，如果你是该组组长，请结合本组讨论情况，为本组某位同学写一份分激励性评价报告，内容须包含以下要点：
•the skill/the advantage/the personal quality the student has
•one thing the student did
•some advice for the student
要求：（1）词数80词左右；
（2）不得出现真实的人名、校名．
Han Mei is an easygoing girl who gets along well with everyone．She is also talented in performing．What's the most important，she is warm-hearted．
Once she knew a girl in her neighborhood had so serious an illness that a large amount of money was needed．She put forward a suggestion calling on all the kids to give away pocket money to the unlucky girl．Besides，she organized a charity show to raise more money．When the girl and her parents got the money，they were really moved．
Han Mei should also put more time and energy into study and try to be a student with both a kind heart and good grades．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇给出写作要点的提纲类作文．内容为根据以下提示，为本组某位同学写一份激励性评价报告．时态为一般现在时和一般过去时．人称主要为第三人称．写作要点包括：1．the skill/the advantage/the personal quality the student has；2．one thing the student did；3．some advice for the student．
常用到的重点短语和句型：get along well with与…相处的好
so…that 如此…以至于
give away 捐赠
besides 另外
try to do sth 尽力做某事等．

解答 Han Mei is an easygoing girl who gets along well with everyone．She is also talented in performing．What's the most important，she is warm-hearted．（高分句型）（韩梅的性格优点）
Once she knew a girl in her neighborhood had so serious an illness that a large amount of  money was needed．（高分句型）She put forward a suggestion calling on all the kids to give away pocket money to the unlucky girl．Besides，she organized a charity show to raise more money．When the girl and her parents got the money，they were really moved．（韩梅做过的一件事）
Han Mei should also put more time and energy into study and try to be a student with both a kind heart and good grades．（建议）

点评 这是一篇给出写作要点的提纲类作文．该作文为考生提供了题目与一个简单的写作提纲，将考生的写作控制在一定范畴．它要求考生紧扣题目主题，并根据提纲提示的思路和要点展开段落．考生在审题上一般不会出现障碍，在组织作文时注意所列要点需全部包括在作文中，注意句子的主谓宾格式，而不是简单的材料要点的堆砌．