Question

【题目】In 60-120 words, write about the topic“A goal I would like to achieve”.（以“一个我想实现的目标”为题，

写一篇 60-120 个词的短文，标点符号不占格）

The following are for reference only.（以下内容仅供参考）

What is your goal?

Why do you want to do this?

How do you plan to achieve your goal?

（注意：文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。）

Answer 1

【答案】A goal I would like to achieve

We all have goals. As for me, my goal is to become a teacher. In my opinion, it is one of the greatest jobs in the world.

In order to realize my goal, I will work hard at my lesson first. Only when I have solid basic knowledge can I teach my students well. Second, I will develop my hobbies. As for a teacher, I must have a wide range of interests. What’s more, I decide to join some volunteer activities, such as helping the disabled. It is good to train my patience.

As a Chinese verb says, A journey of a thousand miles begins with the first step. I will fight for my dream from now on.

【解析】

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