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10．2015年12月巴中争创"全国文明城市"，举全市人民之力大力整治不文明、不良的行为．作为一名中学生，你是否该尽一点绵薄之力？在日常生活中，你看到身边有哪些不良现象？请列举一些并就某些方面说说你的做法和想法．提示：文明城市：civilized cities；  speak loudly，cut in line，waste food，unfriendly（冷漠的），offer no help …
要求：1．参考提示语，可适当发挥；
2．语句通顺，意思连贯，书写工整；
3．文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
4．词数：不少于80词．（开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数）
In our daily life，I usually see some bad behaviors around us．For example，
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I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
①For middle school students，we should try our best to keep away from bad habits．对于中学生，我们应该尽力远离坏习惯．句子中try one's best to do sth表示尽力做某事，keep away from 这里的意思是远离．
②I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment．我认为，如果每个人都能更多地考虑别人，我们将有一个更好的生活环境．句子中think后面跟的是一个从句，这个从句由if引导，而if引导的句子，主句用一般将来时，从句用一般现在时．

解答 In our daily life，I usually see some bad behaviors around us．（引出话题）For example，I often hear people speak and laugh loudly in public．It is too noisy．Some people cut in line while others are waiting．It makes me unhappy．And in our school dining hall，I often see students waste food．At times，people seem unfriendly and offer no help when others are in trouble．（列举身边不文明行为）For me，my parents are strict with me．They often tell me to behave well．So I never drop litter about．And I never draw on the desk or on the wall．I am polite to old people．（我的做法）
For middle school students，we should try our best to keep away from bad habits（高分句型）．"civilized Bazhong"will be achieved．（作为一名中学生应该怎么做）
I think if everyone can think more of others，we'll have a better living environment（高分句型）．（发出倡议）

点评 此为材料作文，要仔细审题，抓住重点，在阐述自我保护的方法时要把所给信息条理清楚的表达出来，可使用一些表示顺序的词，使论述更明确，更有层次感．还要注意多使用一些委婉的提建议的句型，尽量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥单调．要求语句通顺，语法，词汇，时态正确，书写规范．