Question

【题目】写作。

假如你的朋友Tony是名“侦探控”，业余时间都花在看侦探小说、电影、电视剧上，严重影响了学习，请根据下面提供的信息，以“ What should he do?” 为题，写篇短文介绍他的情况，并提出你的建议。

性格特征	耐心细致、善于寻找线索，有当侦探的天赋
业余爱好	痴迷侦探故事，经常熬夜看电影、电视、小说
未来理想	立志成为一名侦探，相信自己一定能成功
主要问题	课上瞌睡，影响学习；缺少锻炼，体质不行
你的建议	······（不少于两点）

要求：1. 表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；

2. 必须包括所有相关信息，并作适当发挥；

3. 词数：100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；

4. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等。

What should he do?

My friend Tony is a detective fan.

Answer 1

【答案】

What should he do?

My friend Tony is a detective fan. He is patient and careful enough to look for clues to something important easily. He has a gift for being a detective and he hopes to be a detective in the future. He wants to prove that you can do almost anything if you never give up. He often stays up late to watch detective films, drama series or read detective novels.

As a result, he always feels sleepy in class and his hobby has a bad influence on his study. Moreover, because he seldom does sports, he is not as healthy as before.

I think it’s important for us to have some hobbies, but we can’t spend too much time on them. And we should remember the importance of study and try to achieve a balance between our hobbies and our schoolwork. Otherwise, they will do harm to us.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇作文叫小作者就Tony把业余时间都花在看侦探小说、电影、电视剧上，严重影响了学习这一问题发表自己的观点，小作者首先要认真阅读前面的提示认真审题，确定文章的中心。注意文章文体、人称和时态。要求介绍。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。小作者还必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。

写作亮点：这篇短文不仅使用了大量的的短语，可见该生英语功底扎实。如He is patient and careful enough to look for clues to something important easily. He has a gift for being a detective and he hopes to be a detective in the future. He wants to prove that you can do almost anything if you never give up.等使文章的表达更丰富，更有逻辑性，更富有条理。