Question

18．假如你是李华，你的笔友Jim最近沉溺于玩电脑游戏，为此你很担心，请根据下表提示给Jim 写一封信，谈谈你的看法及建议．

Jim 过去	功课好，积极参加学校的各项活动．
Jim 现在	对学习没兴趣，上课不专心，不按时交作业．
你的看法	玩电脑游戏可能使你放松，但…
你的建议	（至少发挥两点）

要求：1．词数70左右．2．要点完整，层次清楚，语法正确．
Dear Jim，
I really feel worried about you．
You used to do well in your lessons and took an active part in the activities at school．But now you are so crazy about computer games that you have no interest in your schoolwork and don't listen to the teachers as carefully as before in class．Also，you can't hand in your homework on time．
Perhaps playing computer games can make you fell relaxed，but if you spend too much time on it，you will have less time to study．And it may do harm to your health．For example，it can hurt your eyes and neck．
I hope you should achieve a balance between your schoolwork and your hobbies．Why not join in some outdoor activities when you feel bored？As your friend，I'll be glad to share your happiness and sadness．
Best wishes．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇给材料作文，写一封信，向吉姆提出建议．本文已经给出了主要写作要点，动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥．写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一二人称，主要用一般现在时态进行叙述．语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯．适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．
高分句型：
①Perhaps playing computer games can make you feel relaxed，but if you spend too much time on it，you will have less time to study．也许玩电脑游戏可以让你感觉轻松，但是如果你花太多的时间在它上，你将有更少的时间学习．句子中make sb do sth表示让某人做某事；if引导条件状语从句，主句用一般将来时，从句用一般现在时．
②Why not join in some outdoor activities when you feel bored．当你感到无聊的时候为什么不参加一些户外活动呢？句子中why not表示为什么不，后面跟动词原形；when引导一个时间状语从句．

解答 Dear Jim，
I really feel worried about you．（引出话题）You used to do well in your lessons and took an active part in the activities at school．But now you are so crazy about computer games that you have no interest in your schoolwork and don't listen to the teachers as carefully as before in class．Also，you can't hand in your homework on time．（介绍过去与现在对学习的态度）
Perhaps playing computer games can make you feel relaxed，but if you spend too much time on it，you will have less time to study（高分句型）．And it may do harm to your health．For example，it can hurt your eyes and neck．（电脑游戏的优缺点）
I hope you should achieve a balance between your schoolwork and your hobbies．Why not join in some outdoor activities when you feel bored（高分句型）？As your friend，I'll be glad to share your happiness and sadness．（建议）
Best wishes．
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少．如used to sth过去常常做某事；takepart in参加；as…as…和…一样；hand in上交；on time按时；do harm to伤害；why not do sth为什么不做某事等．学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，让文章更出彩．