Question

9．随着扬州经济的发展，私家车的数量不断攀升，同时我们的空气污染越发严重．去年冬天雾霾（the thick haze）天气接二连三出现，生活环境日趋恶化．就此，你班展开讨论美丽扬州应该从何做起．请根据下面提示写一篇短文，向报社投稿．

扬州现状	美丽扬州从我做起	未来展望
=1．车辆越来越多 =2．空气越来越差 =3．…	=1．出门坐公交 =2．… =3．…	=1．水更清，天更蓝 =2．… =3．…．

要求：1）表达清楚，语法正确，上下连贯；
2）必须包括所有相关信息，并作适当发挥；
3）词数：100词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
4）不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名．
With the development of Yangzhou，more and more families have cars．However，the environment of our city is becoming worse and worse．Last winter，we experienced several days of the worst air pollution in history．And many people got sick because of the polluted air．
As the student of this ancient city，we should take actions to beautify our hometown．We can take buses to go out； we can ask our relatives not to drive cars as often as possible．What's more，we can call on the whole society to plant more trees．
If each of us tries our best to protect our environment，I believe we will enjoy bluer sky and cleaner rivers．Yangzhou will be more suitable and comfortable to live in．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是说说扬州的环境现状以及怎样从我做起保护环境．时态主要为一般过去时和一般现在时．人称主要为第一、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
1．扬州现状；车辆越来越多；空气越来越差
2．从我做起；出门坐公交…
3．未来展望；水更清，天更蓝…
常用到的重点短语：
比较级+and+比较级 越来越…
because of 因为…
take action to do sth 采取行动做某事
as…as possible 尽可能…
what's more 再者
try one's best to do sth 尽力做某事
【高分句型】
1．And many people got sick because of the polluted air．
because of 因为…of是介词，后加名词代词或动名词．
2．①What's more，we can call on the whole society ②to plant more trees．
①what's more 再者
②动词不定式作为目的状语
3．①If each of us ②tries our best to protect our environment，I believe③we will enjoy bluer sky and cleaner rivers．
①if引导条件状语从句，遵循主将从现的规则．
②try one's best to do sth 尽力做某事
③believe后是省略了引导词that的宾语从句．

解答 With the development of Yangzhou，more and more families have cars．However，the environment of our city is becoming worse and worse．Last winter，we experienced several days of the worst air pollution in history．And many people got sick because of the polluted air．【高分句型】（扬州现状；车辆越来越多；空气越来越差）
As the student of this ancient city，we should take actions to beautify our hometown．We can take buses to go out； we can ask our relatives not to drive cars as often as possible．What's more，we can call on the whole society to plant more trees．【高分句型】（从我做起；出门坐公交．植树）
If each of us tries our best to protect our environment，I believe we will enjoy bluer sky and cleaner rivers．【高分句型】Yangzhou will be more suitable and comfortable to live in．（未来展望；水更清，天更蓝）

点评 这是一篇给材料作文．题目中给出的材料较为简略，动笔前应根据材料内容组织语言，列出简单提纲，确定句子的时态、句式、关键单词等问题．注意不要遗漏要点，可适当发挥．结合材料可知本文主要是第一人称，时态一般应该用一般现在时，注意情态动词后面动词用原形．为了使表达更有逻辑性，可以使用序数词，连接词等．此类作文首先要做的就是认真阅读材料，不能跑题偏题．写作中注意一些基础的写作常识，不犯低级错误．只要平时积累足够，就一定能获得满意的分数．
文中使用了一些短语也使用了一些主从复合句，为文章增色不少．如With the development of 随着…的发展；because of因为；take actions采取行动．Try one's best to do sth尽最大努力做某事；If each of us tries our best to protect our environment，I believe we will enjoy bluer sky and cleaner rivers．如果我们每个人都努力保护我们的环境，我相信我们会享受更蓝的天空和清洁的河流．等等．