Question

12．书面表达根据要求完成短文写作，请将作文写在答题卡指定位置上．
常言道"良言一句三冬暖，恶语伤人六月寒"．假设你是李雷，你将要参加学校举办的英语演讲比赛，主题是"语言的力量"，请你写一篇英文演讲稿，内容包括：
你的一次受老师或同学言语激励的经历（事情的经过以及对你的影响）；
呼吁同学们要注意自身言语对他人的影响．
作文要求：
1．不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现学校的真实名称、老师和同学的真实姓名．
2．语句连贯，字数80个左右．作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数．
Ladies and gentlemen，
How will words influence others？Let me tell you one of my experiences．                                 

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
 Even when I became a middle school student，I failed to do things well．   甚至当我成为中学生的时候，我也不能把事情做好．这是when引导的时间状语从句，当…时候．
 高分句型二
  I tried to do everything by myself and I found that I could do things well．   我试着自己做每件事，我发现我能做好事情．try to do sth．试着做某事．  I found that I could do things well．是宾语从句，I found 是主句，that I could do things well是从句．

解答 How will words influence others？Let me tell you one of my experiences【开头点明主题】．Parents are always so nervous about their children's study that they do almost everything for them．I am just one of these children．Even when I became a middle school student，I failed to do things well．【高分句型一，注意时间状语从句的使用】．I began to doubt my ability and felt very sad．Then one day my deskmate said to me，"Always trust yourself．You can surely do things well．"Encouraged by what he said，I tried to do everything by myself and I found that I could do things well．【高分句型二，注意宾语从句的使用】【正文部分详细介绍自己的经历】
Encouraging words can really help people a lot．【结尾紧扣主题】

点评 本篇写作需注意要求中所提供的要点，不可遗漏．需在平时积累相关的词汇，写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系．上下文之间可以适当使用连接词．如but，so，then等．