Question

15．未来很美好，你长大以后打算做什么？厨师、记者、艺术家…描述一个你梦想的职业．
提示：
1．短文应含思维导图中相关的要点，条理清楚，行文连贯．
2．短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名；
3．词数不少于80，短文开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一
When I grow up，I'm going to be a singer．当我长大后，我要成为一名歌手．   这是when引导的时间状语从句，当…时候．
高分句型二
 I hope my dream can come true．我希望我的梦想成真．这是一个宾语从句，I hope是主句，后面的是宾语从句．

解答 When I grow up，I'm going to be a singer．【高分句型一，注意时间状语从句的使用】【开篇点明主题】I love music and I'm good at singing．I want to be a singer like Lady Gaga．I can sing beautiful songs for people and make them happy．And also I can make much money．Then I can buy a beautiful house with a garden for my parents because they do so much for me．
To realize my dream，first，I'm going to join the singing club and practice singing as often as possible．Second，I'm going to be a student at a music school．At last，I'm going to take part in some singing competition to improve myself．【正文部分详细介绍为什么要做歌手以及如何为实现理想而努力】I hope my dream can come true．
【高分句型二，注意宾语从句的使用】．【结尾紧扣主题】

点评 动笔前应先认真阅读材料，围绕所给材料组织内容，确定主要短语，句式等问题．注意不要遗漏要点，句子要通顺连贯，没有语法错误．