Question

【题目】“你养我长大，我陪你变老。”父母亲一直在为我们的成长默默付出，成长要学会感受爱、回报爱。今天是父亲节，是我们向爸爸表达感激的好机会。请根据以下所给要点，写一篇英语短文。

1．给我生命，一直照顾我成长；

2．努力工作，为我提供良好的生活和教育条件；

3．拥有爱心，教我学会…

4．今天，我要为您……(自主发挥，至少两点)

注意事项：

1．词数90左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；

2．文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息。

You raise me up. I will be with you in your life. You are an important person in the process of my growth.

Answer 1

【答案】You raise me up. I will be with you in your life. You are an important person in the process of my growth.

You give me life and take care of me all the time, when I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me. In order to let me live a pleasant life and receive good education you always work hard from morning to evening every day. You are also a man who has a heart full of love.

You are ready to help people in need. It is you who teach me to be a kind person. In the past, I never said “I love you” to you. Today is Father’s Day. I want to say it to you loudly. I will study harder to get better results.

I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.

【解析】亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如raise me up，in your life，take care of ，all the time，patient enough to help me，and encourage me，in order to，live a pleasant life，work hard，from morning to evening，full of love，in need，in the past，get better results等。而In order to let me live a pleasant life and receive good education you always work hard from morning to evening every day. / You are also a man who has a heart full of love./ I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.等多种非谓语动词结构和从句句式的运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。