Question

17．假如你是初三学生李华，在初三紧张的学习生活中，你感受到了父母对你浓浓的爱．请根据以下要点提示，向你的美国朋友Tom写一封信．
1．成绩并不优异，但父母一直鼓励完；
2．父母在其他方面对你的关爱（自拟两点）；
3．表达对父母的感激之情；
4．请对方回信，谈谈自己的父母．
具体要求：
1．所写内容必须包括上面提示的所有要点，可适当发挥，但不要逐字翻译；
2．词数：100个词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3．语句通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，字迹工整；
4．文中不得出现真实校名、姓名等其它信息，否则，不予评分．
DearTom，
     How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am underpressure．
（成绩并不优异，但父母一直鼓励）I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（父母在生活上对我的照顾）Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me．They look after me as well as they can．（父母对我的精神上的鼓励）Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．
（父母在其他方面对你的关爱）Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents．
（请对方回信） Please write soon and tell me about your parents．
Yours sincerely，

                                                                 Yours sincerely
                                                                      Li  Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文，要求是向你的美国朋友Tom写一封信说说父母对你浓浓的爱．写作要点是四点，1．成绩并不优异，但父母一直鼓励；2．父母在其他方面对你的关爱（自拟两点）；3．表达对父母的感激之情；4．请对方回信，谈谈自己的父母，人称以第一人称为主来写，时态以一般现在时为主．
重点短语和句型：encourage sb to do sth鼓励某人去做某事，go out of one's way to do sth不辞辛苦做某事，pay attention to注意等等

解答 Dear Tom，
   How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am under pressure．
   I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（成绩并不优异，但父母一直鼓励） Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me（高分句型）．They look after me as well as they can．（父母在生活上对我的照顾）
Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．（父母对我的精神上的鼓励）
   Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents（父母在其他方面对你的关爱）（高分句型）．
   Please write soon and tell me about your parents．（请对方回信）                                                               Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                  Li Hua

点评 本文是一篇给材料作文，短文的开头已经给出．写作时先要围绕这些要点组织材料，确定写作内容，注意将这些要点全部表达出来，并且要有适当的发挥，在谈到自己的观点时，要结合活动内容，写出自己的观点．