Question

16．假定上周六晚上，你们全家在一家饭店就餐．请你根据以下要点提示．用英语写一篇短文，描述事情发生的经过，并适当加以评论．
    要点提示：
    （1）邻桌年轻人大声说笑、吸烟．
    （2）你请他们不要那样做．
    （3）他们不听，反而嘲笑你．
    （4）你认为：①他们在公共场所那样做是不对的．
              ②年轻人是天津的未来，应该…
  参考词汇：嘲笑laugh at
  要求：
    （1）词数：80～100个．
    （2）短文开头已给出，不计入总词数．
    （3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥．
Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinnerin a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（评论和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇给材料作文．本文所给材料比较简略，故动笔前要认真阅读材料，根据材料组织内容，适当发挥，不能遗漏要点．写作中注意重点：1．介绍事情的发生经过，2．对此评论，表达自己的看法．根据材料内容可知本文在叙述事情经过时，应用一般过去时态．表达观点时，可用一般现在时态．本文人称较为复杂，注意时态语与时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题．写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系．
重点短语和句型although虽然，in my opinion依我看来，what's more更有甚者，full of充满，try to do尽力去做…，refuse to do拒接去做…，laugh at嘲笑，be proud of以…为骄傲，pay attention to注意…，none of my business不关我的事等等

解答 答案：
（介绍事情的经过）Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinner in a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．（高分句型）While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（评论和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．（高分句型）What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．

点评 本篇书面表达应根据提纲内容准确描述事情并且表达自己的个人观点．在描述事情时应采用正确的时态．同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性．温馨提醒：必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等．