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13．随着网络的发展，人们消费观念的转变，购物方式也在悄然地发生变化．"网购"成为一种时尚，越来越多的学生也正加入到网购群体当中．请你根据以下表格的提示，写一篇网上购物的文章．

Advantages	Disadvantages
buy what you are interested in easily	The goods are different from the pictures you see on the Internet
avoid getting too tired； save time	Buy something you are not really needed
choose different goods； The price is lower

注意：①所表述的内容必须包含表格中的所有方面；
②文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称及其它相关信息，否则不予评分；
③词数：80 词左右，文章开头已给出，不计入总词数．
提示词汇：网购shopping on line； 避免做某事avoid doing sth；商品goods； 导致cause 
With the development of the Internet，many people are used to shopping on line．It has become a fashion in our daily life．Some of us students also join the group．
Shopping on line has many advantages．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy what you're interested in without going outdoors．You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowded people and cars and save time．When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，whose prices are generally lower．
Every coin has two sides．Its disadvantages are obvious，too．On one hand，it's very easy for you to buy goods different from the pictures you see on the Internet．On the other hand，shopping on line may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed．That's a waste of money．
All in all，I love shopping on line．．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇图表作文．内容是说说网购的利弊．时态主要为一般现在时．人称主要为第二、三人称．
写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文．
其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：
一．优点：1．很容易买到自己感兴趣的
          2．节约时间，不会拥挤劳累
          3．选择不同的物品，价格通常比较便宜

二．缺点：1．实物和图片不符
         2．容易购买大量不需要的东西，造成浪费
常用到的重点短语：
be used to doing sth 习惯于做某事
be interested in 对…感兴趣
avoid doing sth 避免做某事
on one hand…，on the other hand…一方面…另一方面…
a waste of 浪费
【高分句型】
1．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy ①what you're interested in②without going outdoors．
①what引导的宾语从句，作为buy的宾语．
②without介词，没有…，后加名词代词或动名词．
2．①When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，②whose prices are generally lower．
①When shopping on line是when you shop on line的缩写．
②whose作为关系词的非限制性定语从句
3．On the other hand，①shopping on line may cause people to buy goods ②that are not badly needed．
①动名词短语做主语．
②that作为关系词的定语从句，that作为从句的主语，修饰先行词goods．

解答 With the development of the Internet，many people are used to shopping on line．It has become a fashion in our daily life．Some of us students also join the group．
Shopping on line has many advantages．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy what you're interested in without going outdoors．【高分句型】You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowded people and cars and save time．When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，whose prices are generally lower．【高分句型】（优点）
Every coin has two sides．Its disadvantages are obvious，too．On one hand，it's very easy for you to buy goods different from the pictures you see on the Internet．On the other hand，shopping on line may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed．【高分句型】That's a waste of money．（缺点）
All in all，I love shopping on line．

点评 这是一篇提纲作文．本文要求按照所给的题目结合提示内容完成这篇关于网上购物的文章．写作中要包含网购的优缺点、方面进行陈述，表达出人们的观点等．根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般现在时态，人称主要是第三人称，注意并列连词的使用及主谓一致问题．写作中注意上下文的过度，符合逻辑关系．
这篇短文详细、全面地阐明了自己对网络购物的看法，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息．其中使用了一些固定句式和短语、状语从句中的省略，包含宾语从句和定语从句的准确使用为文章增色不少．如become a fashion in our daily life，On one hand，On the other hand，When shopping on line，buy what you're interested in，whose prices are generally lower．第三段中谚语的恰当使用也是可圈可点的，如Every coin has two sides．学习中再注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理．