题目内容
【题目】书面表达
妈妈的生日即将来临,请以“My First DIY Job”为题,写一篇80词左右的小短文。
提示:1. 决定为妈妈亲自制作一个生日蛋糕,并且对此加以保密;
2. 花了许多时间,制作期间曾经出过错误;
3. 将许多新鲜的水果放在上面;
4. 打开蛋糕盒,就会听到歌曲《生日快乐》;
5. 第一次亲手为妈妈做礼物,感到很高兴,希望妈妈能喜欢。
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【答案】
Mum’s birthday is coming, I decided to make a birthday cake for her, I wanted to make it by myself and keep it secret. It took me a lot of time to make the cake. Lots of things went wrong during that time. I put some fresh fruit on the cake, it looks delicious. When you open the cake’s box, you will hear the song Happy Birthday. This is the first cake I made for my mother, I feel very happy, and I hope my mother will like it.
【解析】
试题分析:本文是材料作文,考生在写作之前必须认真读题,把握写作要求和写作目的。本文要求写My first DIY job,内容是给妈妈做生日礼物的过程。应该用第一人称,时态是一般过去时。写作前最好先列出提纲,写出有关的短语和固定表达备用。最后连起来。
写作亮点:本文做到了包含所有内容要点,语句通顺,标点符号运用正确。还恰当地运用了些短语和句式,如It took me three hours to make it ; go wrong等等。并注意了句子开头的变化和的衔接如:so,because and等等。