Question

4．每年夏天，溺水事故频发．请你就此写一篇短文谈谈你的看法．
内容包括：
（1）我们应该如何防止此类事故发生？（两点建议）
（2）如果看到有人落水，我们应该如何施救？
（3）呼吁同学们热爱生命，注意安全．
作文要求：1不能照抄原文；不得在作文中提到出现的学校真实姓名．
2语句连贯，词数80个左右．作文的开头已经给出，不计入总词数，也不必抄写在答题卡上．
Almost every year in summer，many people are reported dead from drowning accidents．How to prevent such sad accidents？In my opinion，we shouldn't go swimming in dangerous places or places，such as reservoirs and rivers．Second，we had better not swim when we feel tired or hungry．
If we see someone fall into the water，we should save him in aproper way．For example，we can shout loudly as we can to get those with good swimming skills to help him．
Life is valuable．We should take it seriously．We must remember that safety should always come first while swimming．．

Answer 1

分析 本文涉及的内容正好是当下比较严重的一个问题，我认为，本篇书面表达不但考查了学生的知识，又给学生反思的机会，写作要点包括：1．如何防止溺水事件的发生．2．见到落水人员，应该如何办．3．发出呼吁，注意安全．由于这是一篇针对现实的评论，故可用一般现在时态．

解答 Almost every year in summer，many people are reported dead from drowning accidents．How to prevent such sad accidents？In
my opinion，we shouldn't go swimming in dangerous places or places，such as reservoirs and  rivers．Second，we had better not
swim when we feel tired or hungry．
   If we see someone fall into the water，we should save him in a proper way．For example，we can shout loudly as we can to
get those with good swimming skills to help him．
   Life is valuable．We should take it seriously．We must remember that safety should always come first while swimming．

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．写作时，要注意谓语动词形式的变化．另外，还需要使用一些句型和短语，使整篇短文意思连贯，表达流畅．