Question

【题目】书面表达。请将短文写在答题卡相应的位置上。

你的同学刘芳乐于助人(helpful), 积极乐观(positive)。她在上星期日下午回校途中帮助了一位受伤的老人。请根据题示，用英语写一篇短文向英语报English Times 投稿，简要叙述她做好事的经过, 并谈谈你的感想。

注意:(1)短文须包括上述全部要点, 应适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;

(2)词数:100左右。短文开头已给出(不计词数)。

Nowadays, a lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others. However, Liu Fang acted differently.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Nowadays, a lot of people are reportedly unwilling to help others. However, Liu Fang acted differently.

Last Sunday afternoon, on her way back to school, Liu Fang came across an old man lying on the ground, seriously hurt in the leg. She immediately stopped, called 120 and practiced first aid. Soon, the ambulance came. When everything was OK, she left for school.

Such is Liu Fang, a helpful, positive and determined person. Although there might be misunderstanding or even trouble when we do good, I strongly believe that she has done the right thing. As responsible citizens, it is our duty to help people in need. Also, helping others means helping ourselves in a sense, doesn’t it?

【解析】

试题分析：本文是一篇记叙文，记叙文包括时间、地点、人物、事件，首先叙述做好事的经过，将对此好事表明自己的感情提升为要点，更为重要进行阐述，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化，尤其是数字的不同表达法

写作亮点：这篇短文不使用了大量的的短语，可见该生英语功底扎实。.如When everything was OK, she left for school.；it is our duty to help people in need.等，使文章的表达更丰富，更有逻辑性，更富有条理。