Question

【题目】书面表达：

请根据下列表格的提示, 写一篇题为Changes in My Hometown的短文。（80词左右）

内容要点:

过去	现在
1.旧房	1.高楼
2.河水肮脏	2.河水清澈
3.步行、骑自行车上班	3.乘公交车、小汽车上班
4.道路狭窄	4.环形路宽阔
5.居住条件差	5.居住环境舒适

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Answer 1

【答案】

Changes in My Hometown

In the past ten years, great changes have taken place in my hometown. In the past, there used to be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were hard. People went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in my hometown. The river is clean and the water is clear. There are many ring roads and the living conditions are comfortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.

I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. I think my hometown will be much more beautiful in the future.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们描写一下家乡发生的变化。题目中用表格的形式给我们列出了几个方面，包括居住的环境、上班的交通工具、道路等。我们需要将这些变化用正确的英语表达出来。写作时，可以有两个结构来展开，一个是把每个方面的过去和现在对比着写出来；还有一种是先把过去家乡的样子描写出来，再来描写现在的样子。相比较来说，第二种结构较为集中，层次显得比较清楚。文章中涉及家乡过去的样子的，要使用一般过去时态；描写现在时，用一般现在时态。因此要注意每个句子中动词形式的变化。同时还需注意使用比较好的短语和句型，句与句之间使用恰当的连词，使整篇文章意思连贯。

写作亮点：这是一篇比较优秀的短文。作者按照题目要求描写了自己家乡发生的变化。短文的开头第一句话是一个亮点，In the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown，这句话中作者使用了现在完成时态，先点明自己家乡发生了很大的变化。接下来作者详细描写了具体的变化，先写的是家乡过去的样子，这一部分主要使用了一般过去时态，从题目中给出的五个方面进行了阐述。这部分中较好的句型有In the past, there used to be old houses、The roads were narrow and the living conditions were hard.等。然后作者用but进行转折，下面开始描写家乡现在的样子，But now, there are many tall buildings in my hometown、There are many ring roads and the living conditions are comfortable。最后作者发表了自己的感想I think my hometown will be much more beautiful in the future.，我想我的家乡在未来会更加美丽。整篇短文意思完整，结构清晰，表达流畅。