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【题目】今年一月，孝感遭遇极寒天气，暴雪肆虐，持续时间较长，让我们感受到了大自然的威力。为了大家的安全，部分老师和同学主动在校园、走廊等处铲冰、扫雪、铺防滑垫等，为大家做好安全服务。假定你是李华，请你给Xiaogan Daily的编辑写一封信，要点如下：

1. 描述志愿者们助人为乐的事迹；

2. 表达你对这些志愿者的感激和欣赏；

3. 呼吁大家向他们学习，积极参与有利他人的活动。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

3. 书信的开头和结尾已写好，不计入总词数。

参考词汇： 走廊corridor; 铲冰shovel ice; 防滑垫 non-slip mat

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Best wishes.

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Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

I am Li Hua, a high school student. I am writing to express my thanks and admiration for my teachers’ and schoolmates’ actions of goodwill, and appeal to more people to learn from them.

In January , the weather was freezing cold and a snowstorm swept our city. The thick snow and the icy ground made it hard for us to get around. To ensure our safety, some of my teachers and schoolmates offered to shovel ice, sweep snow and lay non-slip mats along the corridors. Even though they were tired out, they were happy to be able to give a hand to people around.

Their kindness has received a lot of praise and recognition. They do set a good example to us . I think we should learn from them and volunteer to do something beneficial to others.

Best wishes!

Yours ,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：

本文书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封书信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇是一封书信：今年一月，孝感遭遇极寒天气，暴雪肆虐，持续时间较长，让我们感受到了大自然的威力。为了大家的安全，部分老师和同学主动在校园、走廊等处铲冰、扫雪、铺防滑垫等，为大家做好安全服务。假定你是李华，请你给Xiaogan Daily的编辑写一封信，要点如下：描述志愿者们助人为乐的事迹；表达你对这些志愿者的感激和欣赏； 呼吁大家向他们学习，积极参与有利他人的活动。

第2步：根据写作要求确定关键词，如：express my thanks and admiration表达我的感谢和赞美；freezing cold极冷；To ensure our safety,为了确保我们的安全；non-slip mats防滑垫；give a hand to帮忙做某事；received a lot of praise and recognition受到许多赞美和认可；等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态语态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

本文内容完整，语言规范，鱼片连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇书信，格式正确，内容齐全，结构布局合理，文中使用高级句子。I am Li Hua, a high school student.句中使用同位语；The thick snow and the icy ground made it hard for us to get around.此句中it做形式宾语，动词不定式的复合结构做真正的宾语；To ensure our safety, some of my teachers and schoolmates offered to shovel ice, sweep snow and lay non-slip mats along the corridors.动词不定式做目的状语；Even though they were tired out, they were happy to be able to give a hand to people around.句中使用让步状语从句；They do set a good example to us .强调谓语运用得当。