Question

【题目】现在越来越多的人成为低头族（People who can’t help checking their phones all day are known as phubbers. Phubbing trends to involve not only the young people, but also the elderly.)，如何引导低头族抬头？你们班举行了以“拒为低头族”为主题的班会。假设你是学生李华，请为班会写一篇100词左右的发言稿，题目所给英文不计入总字数。

要点如下：

1. 你周围有低头族吗？他们成为“低头族”的原因。

2. 成为“低头族”给学习和生活带来的影响。

3. 就如何“拒为低头族”提一些建议。

phubbers(低头族) Phubbing(低头玩手机的行为)

Answer 1

【答案】Nowadays, we can see many people are watching their mobile phones in subway, restaurants, elevators, roads and so on. There is no denying that people who like the mobile phone are concerned about its attractive functions. Phubbers can’t stop sending messages, surfing the Internet, listening to music and even taking photos by using the mobile phone. Moreover, some people have less time to relax themselves. They make use of the time when they are on the way to school or other places to play mobile games.

However, phubbing disturbs not only our study but also our life. On the one hand, phubbers waste lots of time playing cell phone games and sending messages, particularly in class. Other people also complain they are disturbed when phones ring in classrooms. On the other hand, it can lead to health problems. For instance, using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain.

As far as I am concerned, it is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up. Do cherish everything around us and appreciate the scenery ahead of us. What’s more, we should do more exercises and take part in real-life activities. In a word, only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.

【解析】本文属于提纲式作文。高考中提纲式作文非常常见。写提纲式作文要注意以下几点。

1．审题。要弄清题意，确定文章的中心思想、主题，并围绕中心思想组织材料。

2．进行构思，列出简单的提纲，安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。

3．扩展成文。扩展成文时还需：1）确保提纲中段落结构的思路与各段主题句的一致性；2）要灵活运用各种句式，如倒装句、强调句、省略句、主从复合句、分词短语、介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。注意使用高级框架结构的句子，让文章的结构错落有致。避免只是用一两个句式或重复用同一词语；3）用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。

亮点分析：本文内容完整，句式灵活多变，既有简单句又有复杂句。运用了多种句式，有定语从句，名词从句，状语从句，倒装句，非谓语等，还有大量高级词汇和高级句式的运用，表达到位，语言优美，内容丰富。同时使用了大量的连词，使文章层次分明，浑然一体。

在第一段中点明我们周围的“低头族”随处可见。接着用一个复杂句There is no denying that people who like the mobile phone are concerned about its attractive functions.点出了成为“低头族”的主要原因。而这个复杂句中既有一个名词从句又有一个定语从句。接着用非谓语完成了一个较长的句子，Phubbers can’t stop sending messages, surfing … listening …and even taking … by using t…来陈述低头族的原因，再用连词“Moreover”点出另一个原因时用了一个单句+状语从句(they make use of the time when they are on the way to school or other places to play mobile games.)

第二段首先用not only…but also…陈述成为“低头族”给学习和生活带来的影响。接着用连词“on the one hand…on the other hand…”把一段内容有机地结合起来。在这一段中使用了复杂句句：Other people also complain they are disturbed when phones ring in classrooms.和非谓语动词作主语：using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain.

第三段就如何“拒为低头族”提一些建议。在本段中使用了一些高级词汇及句式。如高级词汇As far as I am concerned, What’s more, . o more exercises and take part in ，in a word,高级句式，如虚拟语气“it is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up.”祈使句+and+祈使句，以及由only when引起的倒装句：only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.。