题目内容
【题目】书面表达
你的生日快到了,父亲许诺将送你一份生日礼物。下面就是这份特殊礼物的描述。请你以“Father’s Gift for My Birthday”为题,用第一人称讲述这个故事。要点如下:
1.上周五早晨,父亲带我到家乡的一所农村学校;
2.唯一的教室里有21个学生,大多数是男生,教室小而昏暗(dim);
3.虽然那儿条件很差很穷,但学生学习努力,去年有两个学生考上了大学;
4.你的感想,原来这就是父亲给我的礼物……
注意:1.除要求的内容外,可酌情自由发挥;2.词数:100词左右。
【答案】
One possible version:
Father’s Gift for My Birthday
My birthday of this year fell on last Friday. My father promised to give me a special gift.
Last Friday morning, Father brought me to a village school in his hometown. The school had just one house with one classroom, which was small with dim light, and all the desks and chairs were made of rough boards. There were only 21 students, most of whom were boys. They were listening to the teacher attentively. The teacher told us, while their study conditions were poor, all the students studied very hard and two from the school even went to university last year.
I was deeply struck by their stories. Not until then did I realize that it was my father’s gift for my birthday!
【解析】
试题分析:本篇书面表达属于提纲作文,内容是讲述父亲送我的生日礼物。写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确要点就是主要内容。2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时可以按照提示的3个方面的内容(1. 时间:2. 地点;3. 活动安排。)进行介绍。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时为主。4.注意通知格式。
【亮点说明】本文用时间,地点,事件的先后顺序使文章层次分明,结构紧凑,语言连贯。同时使用了多种句式和结构。比如定语从句The school had just one house with one classroom, which was small with dim light, and all the desks and chairs were made of rough boards.倒装句Not until then did I realize that it was my father’s gift for my birthday!