Question

5．假如你是李华，你的美国笔友Bill来信询问你的家乡是否有雾霾天气，情况如何．请按下面提示写一封电子邮件，开头已给出．
介绍情况：
1．最近发生数次雾霾天气；
2．雾霾天气的危害（至少两条）；
3．正采取各种举措减少其发生；
4．你自己为此做了什么或打算做什么．
注意：词数1 00个左右．
参考词汇：雾霾：smog
Dear Bill，
I'm glad to receive your letter．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd like to tell you somethng about the smog．Recently，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）Anyway，people's life is greatly affected．
Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the smog weather．
As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）In addition，I'll tell the people I meet to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李华，你的美国笔友Bill来信询问你的家乡是否有雾霾天气，情况如何．请按下面提示写一封电子邮件，开头已给出，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：最近发生数次雾霾天气；雾霾天气的危害（至少两条）；正采取各种举措减少其发生；你自己为此做了什么或打算做什么．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：care for关心； Recently最近； take place 发生；because of 由于；Anyway无论如何；Fortunately幸运的是；As for至于，关于；In addition另外；look forward to盼望；
Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）
Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）
As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Bill，
        I'm glad to receive your letter．Thank you for your caring for the weather and my health．Now I'd glad to tell you something about the smog．
        Recently，the smog has occurred a lot of times．It has done great harm to our daily life．Many traffic accidents have taken place just because of the heavy smog and more and more people have to go to see the doctor because of the serious disease caused by the smog．（高分句型一）Anyway，people's life is greatly affected．
        Fortunately，people have further realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment．（高分句型二）People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the smog weather．
        As for me，I'll go to school by bike or on foot，and I won't throw the waste anywhere．（高分句型三）In addition，I'll tell the people I meet to protect the environment．Would you like to tell me some good ideas？I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                           Yours sincerely
                                                                           Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．