Question

【题目】随着社会的发展，网络的流行，许多网络不文明用语也在网上流传开来。假定你是李华，最近学校的校报正在征集英文稿件，请你就“网络不文明用语”话题写一篇英文稿件，内容要点如下：

1. 现状；

2. 危害（损害网络环境，影响身心健康等)；

3. 提出建议（远离不文明用语，共创网络文明环境等）。

注意：1. 词数：100左右；

2. 参考词汇：网络环境the Internet environment不文明的uncivilized

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Answer 1

【答案】With the development of society, more and more people become addicted to the Internet and like chatting online. As a result, lots of uncivilized words come into being, which does great harm to our society. On one hand, they damage the environment of the Internet civilization. On the other hand, they influence teenagers’ physical and mental health, which will have a bad effect on their development.

As high school students, we need to take measures to solve the problem. Firstly, we should call for our classmates and friends to keep away from them and express our ideas politely. Secondly, we should report this problem to the government to ask for some help. Let’s work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere.

【解析】本文是材料作文。写提纲式作文要注意以下几点。

　1．审题，弄清题意，确定文章的主题，并围绕中心思想组织材料。

　2．进行构思，列出简单的提纲，安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。

3．扩展成文。扩展成文时还需要确保提纲中段落结构的思路与各段主题句的一致性。灵活运用各种句式，如倒装句、强调句、省略句、主从复合句、分词短语、介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。注意使用高级框架结构的句子，让文章的结构错落有致。避免只是用一两个句式或重复用同一词语。用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。

亮点：本文内容完整，层次分明，思路清晰，文字连贯，前后表达浑然一体。

本文第一段中指出网络的现状时用了一个由which引导的非限制性定语从句（围绕中心思想组织材料）。接着陈述造成的危害时，用连词“on one hand….on the other hand….”把网络不文明的危害叙述的清晰明了，同时又运用了一个非限制性定语从句（…, which will have a bad effect on their development.），定语从句的运用让文章更加灵活多变。运用了大量的高级词汇，如“With the development of society，become addicted to，as a result，do great harm to…，physical and mental health，have a bad effect on their development”增添了文章的色彩。

第二段中提出自己的建议。在本段中运用连词（Firstly…secondlly）把自己的两个建议连接起来，最后用一个祈使句（Let’s work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere.）来呼吁大家共同努力创造一个和平而文明的网络氛围。在本句中运用了大量的高级词汇，如take measures to d…； solve the problem；keep away from；work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere，让文章更加有可读性。