题目内容
【题目】微信朋友圈似乎已经成为我们与朋友沟通交流必不可少的工具,目前很多中学生也都开通了微信,在朋友圈里发表一些自己的感想。你想让父母看你的朋友圈吗?某英语报社就这一问题做了调查,结果如下:
40%同意 | 60%反对 |
父母可以了解我们的思想动态,及时沟通; 父母可以保护我们不受欺; …… | 每个人都需要隐私,朋友圈是我们的私人空间; 我们与父母之间有代沟,让他们看我们的朋友圈可能产生误会; …… |
请根据以上信息写一篇短文,向该报社描述这一现象,并发表自己的看法。
注意:词数不少于100字。
参考词汇:微信Wechat 朋友圈Moments
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【答案】Nowadays,it seems that the Moments section of Wechat has become a popular part of the social networking platform.But do you think parents should be allowed to see their children's Moments?According to the newly- conducted survey above,the results are as follows:
40% of the students surveyed think parents should be allowed.Firstly,welcoming parents to their Moments will promote understanding and strengthen mutual communication.Besides,teenagers are easily misled by the complicated society.If they give their parents a place in their online world,they can be protected.
However,60% of the participants think otherwise.First and foremost,everyone needs some privacy and has their own secrets and lifestyles.Moreover,the generation gap is always a big problem.A lot of misunderstandings may arise if parents are enabled to see the posts.
Anyway,in my opinion,I believe blocking our parents in Moments is not a bad idea,as no social media can replace face-to-face communication.
【解析】这是一篇描述性并表明观点的提纲类作文。文章内容要点已经给出。同学们在写这篇文章时,要注意以下几点:1. 通篇以一般现在时态为主。2. 要点要齐全。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词,使上下文行文流畅,衔接自然流程。3. 注意分类与总结。全文应包含两种不同的观点,要注意分类书写,明确简洁,且对比明显。同时也要总结自身观点,结合实际给出理由。
【范文亮点】
文章条理结构清晰。开篇结合实际,提出问题,同时引出下文不同观点,具有吸引力。二三四段分别写了两种不同观点及理由和自己的看法,明确简洁。
采用了主语从句(Nowadays,it seems that the Moments section of Wechat has become a popular part of the social networking platform.)和动名词作主语(Firstly,welcoming parents to their Moments will promote understanding and strengthen mutual communication.)等高级句式。
采用了According to ,Firstly,Besides,However,First and foremost,Moreover,Anyway,In my opinion等多种连接词,形式多样,使句子灵活串起。