题目内容
【题目】One day a nice old man found a cocoon (茧) of a butterfly(蝴蝶). He took it home.
A few days later, a small opening appeared; he sat and watched the butterfly for several hours as it struggled to force its body through that little hole.
Then it seemed to stop making any progress. It appeared as if it had gotten as far as it could and it could go no further. Then the man decided to help the butterfly, so he took a pair of scissors and cut off the remaining bit of the cocoon. The butterfly then appeared easily.
But it had a swollen body and small, fragile wings. The man continued to watch the butterfly because he expected that, at any moment, the wings would enlarge and expand to be able to support the body, which would be smaller in time. Neither happened! In fact, the butterfly spent the rest of its life crawling (慢慢爬行) around with a swollen body and fragile wings. It never was able to fly.
The man did not understand that the limited cocoon and the struggle required for the butterfly to get through the tiny opening were Nature’s way of forcing fluid (液体) from the body of the butterfly into its wings so that it would be ready for flight once it achieved its freedom from the cocoon.
【写作内容】
1)以约30个词概括故事的主要内容。
2)以约120个词就“个人成长需要艰难生活的磨砺”这一话题发表你的看法,内容包括:
(1)你读了这则故事后的感受。
(2)叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果。
(3)假如你是父母一方,你会如何磨砺自己的孩子?
【写作要求】
1 使用实例支持你的论点,不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,语篇连贯。
【答案】A kind man cut a cocoon open in order to relieve the pain of a butterfly struggling out of the cocoon, only to find it could never fly because of his help.
Our life is more or less like this. Sometimes, struggles or obstacles in our life are a must for our growth. It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success.
Nowadays, with only one child in most families, parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him/her what should be done by himself. As a result, too much care and protection from parents deprives children of chances to grow strong by overcoming obstacles.
If I were a parent, I would first keep my child well informed that life is never easy and that he/she should be ready to face any difficulty. Besides, I would expose him/her to the hardships in life, providing him/her with chances to take on challenges.
【解析】本文是一篇材料类作文。1. 用约30个单词概括上文主要内容;不要用原文原句。但要囊括人物、事件,范文中使用了许多高级词汇in order to,relieve the pain of,because of和句型only to find;struggling out of the cocoon,非谓语结构,以提高文章的档次。
2. 用约120个单词,以“个人成长需要艰难生活的磨砺”发表你的观点,
考生在成文时应注意:合理发挥想象力,使文章的表达自然,丰满。文章的写作要点要齐全: (1)你读了这则故事后的感受。Our life is more or less like this…(2)叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果。Nowadays, with only one child in most families,…(3)假如你是父母一方,你会如何磨砺自己的孩子?If I were a parent, I would…注意文章的人称:以第一人称为主。时态:一般现在时。注意使用高级词汇more or less,As a result,,deprive somebody of,keep my child well informed,Besides, expose him/her to和句型,以提高文章的档次;恰当使用一些连词、插入语,使文章表达自然,流畅。注意次数:80—120之间。
【范文亮点】①It is these struggles or obstacles that increase our willpower and contribute to our success. 强调句;②parents do whatever they can to satisfy the child’s needs and even do for him/her what should be done by himself.宾语从句;③If I were a parent, I would first keep my child well informed that虚拟语气。