题目内容
你的朋友汤姆因在学校使用手机被学校处分,他感到很困惑,写信跟你求助。请根据以下结构提示给汤姆回信。开头结尾已给出。
Beginning: Your letter reached me yesterday. It said in your letter that……..
Paragraph 1: 手机的优点:联系便捷
Paragraph 2: 带手机上学存在的问题:干扰教学,有害学习和健康。
Ending: It is right for school to prevent you from using cellphones in school.
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Your letter reached me yesterday. It said in your letter that you were punished for using cellphones, which puzzled you.
There is no doubt that cellphones can bring us much convenience. We can keep in touch with friends and families wherever they are. Besides, the cellphone is a way to fun.
However, there are some problems with using cellphones. The ring of phones can disturb teachers and students in the class. It has been proved that often using cellphones does harm to health. Another problem is that some students can spend too much time and money on cellphones and sending messages, which will result in bad results in study.
As a student, he should concentrate on study. It is right for school to prevent you from using cellphones.
【解析】
试题分析:题目要求给汤姆写一封回信,帮助他解决遇到的困惑。回信的结构已经列出,需要学生按照此结构进行要点的补充。第一段对来信做一下总结;第二段主要写手机给人带来的方便之处;第三段重点论述手机对学习的影响;最后一段强调不能在学校使用手机。
亮点说明:范文注意使用Besides, However, As a student等衔接上下文,做到了语意连贯;
范文使用了较多的用法知识:定语从句which puzzled you, which will result in bad results in study;固定句型There is no doubt that cellphones can bring us much convenience.;让步状语从句wherever they are;主语从句It has been proved that often using cellphones does harm to health.;表语从句that some students can spend too much time and money on cellphones等,提升了作文的层次;
范文还使用了keep in touch with;concentrate on;prevent ... from doing sth.等短语和固定搭配,使作文内容比较充实。
考点:书信类作文