Question

15．假定你是李华，下个月将要参加主题为"My Favorite English Play"的英语演讲比赛（speech contest），已经写好演讲稿（speech draft），想请外教Mr．Henry给予指导．请你根据下面提示给他写一封邮件：
1  写信目的
2  指导内容（词汇，语法，结构，口语等）
3  表达感激
注意：
1．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯，合乎逻辑；
2．词数100词左右．
Dear Mr．Henry，
                                                                         
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一封电子邮件．写作要点包括：1 写信目的；2 指导内容（词汇，语法，结构，口语等）；3 表达感激．写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
重点词汇：do sb a favour（帮助某人）；draft（草稿）；far from （远非，完全不）；be sure of （确信，对…有把握）；attachment（附件）；in addition（另外）；at your convenience（在某人方便的时候）；Look forward to （盼望，期待）．
高分句型：1．Next month I'm going to ①participate in an English speech contest②with the title My Favorite English Play．
                 ①participate in an English speech contest 参加英语口语比赛；②介词短语做后置定语．
                 2．In addition，I'm wondering whether you can help me with my oral speech at your convenience．
                 whether引导一个宾语从句，作动词wonder的宾语．

解答 Dear Mr．Henry，
I'm Li Hua．I'm writing to ask you to do me a favour．Next month I'm going to participate in an English speech contest with the title My Favorite English Play（高分句型一）．I've finished my speech draft，but I find it still far from satisfactory．
   I'm not sure of the proper expressions of some English words．And there may also be some mistakes in grammar and sentence structures．Would you be so kind to improve my draft in the attachment？In addition，I'm wondering whether you can help me with my oral speech at your convenience．
   I'd appreciate it if you could give me your guidance．Looking forward to your reply．
                                                               Yours，
                                                                Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意要点的提炼要全，关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．