Question

【题目】最近的一项研究表时，大约50%的青少年有不吃早餐的习惯。请根据下面的提示用英语写一篇短文。

原因：晚上学习太晚，不吃早餐可以多睡一会儿；女孩子为保持苗条身材不吃早餐。

结果：课堂睡觉，注意力下降；学业不理想；

专家意见：早餐不可少：

1）提供全天所需要的能昨的30%；

2）有助于创造思维，做出更好的判断。

注意：1.可以适当的增内容使文章充实。

2.词数120左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。

A recent study shows that 50% of the school kids do not have breakfast.

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Answer 1

【答案】A recent study shows that nearly 50 percent of the school kids do not have breakfast.

The reasons for this are as follows. Some students who stay up late into the night choose to miss breakfast so that they can have a few extra minutes to sleep. Besides, some schoolgirls want to keep slim and they often go to school without breakfast. As a result, these students tend to feel sleepy all day and have bad memories; therefore, it is hard for them to get high marks in all kinds of tests.

In fact, the morning meal plays an important part. It can provide 30 percent of the whole day’s energy. In order to get a creative mind and better judgment, school kids should start their days with a regular breakfast. Thus, they can both get good marks and keep healthy.

【解析】本文是提纲作文。高考中提纲式作文非常常见。写提纲式作文要注意以下几点。

　 1．审题。要弄清题意，确定文章的中心思想、主题，并围绕中心思想组织材料。

　 2．进行构思，列出简单的提纲，安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。

3．扩展成文。扩展成文时还需： 1）灵活运用各种句式，如倒装句、强调句、省略句、主从复合句、分词短语、介词短语等，从而增加文章的可读性。2）注意使用高级框架结构的句子，让文章的结构错落有致。避免只是用一两个句式或重复用同一词语； 2）用好连接词，注意段落间、句子间的连贯性。

亮点分析：文章中句式灵活多变，既有简单句又有复杂句。同时还有定语从句，结果状语从句。文章中大量使用连词，让所写文章层次分明，思路清晰，文字连贯，前后表达浑然一体。

文章第一段用一个单句简明扼要地表明最近的研究结果---近一半的人不吃早餐。第二段说明人们不吃早餐的原因。首先用一句根据“The reasons for this are as follows.”用一个复杂句来说明第一个原因：Some students who stay up late into the night choose to miss breakfast so that they can have a few extra minutes to sleep。在这个复杂句中运用了由who引导的定语从句（who stay up late into the night choose to miss breakfast）及由so that引导的状语从句（so that they can have a few extra minutes to sleep）。用连词了“. Besides,”引出一个并列句，即第二个原因：some schoolgirls want to keep slim and they often go to school without breakfast.最后用一个连词“As a result,”说明不吃早餐的结果之一，再用“therefore,”更进一步说明不吃早餐的后果不好。

第三段针对此提出专家的建议。用一个“In fact”说明早餐不可少的两点事实。最后用一个“Thus”作出总结，早餐的好处确实很大。在本段中大量地运用单句，简单易懂却有说服力。